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Raven's Watch

She's always there, watching Over the quiet graves Torn between life and death Waiting 'till her time ends When at last, she can be Reunited with him Without his strong arms She falters and fails Ne'er to love again Her gentle heart is Smashed beyond repair She is the one They call Raven Soulless, helpless Without his love She stands and Forever Looks over Where they Buried Him Written By Nick Bagnall For Contest "Among the dead" 13th Place

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Laura Breidenthal

Date: 11/2/2011 5:05:00 PM

This is an amazing poem! Immediately a favorite! Thanks a mill for sharing! Always, Laura

Elizabeth Lepapa

Date: 8/19/2011 2:56:00 PM

Hope she find peace after her love went.this is a nice one representing challeges not only of love but love.we all have to take heart not to fall down.luv liz

David Williams

Date: 6/3/2011 12:11:00 PM

hey Nick, love this one, David

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 2/24/2011 12:12:00 PM

I had only read a couple of the poems and wanted so badly to enter but...too many things were going on and didn't get to. I knew Constance would have a time selecting her winners. There is a long list of winners here. You should be so proud of your winning poem congratulations Nick. Love, Carol

Kash Poet

Date: 2/19/2011 10:57:00 AM

Wonderful story with a challenging form----enjoyed.Congrats Nick on your well deserved win in the contest.---kashinath

James Fraser

Date: 2/19/2011 7:25:00 AM

Many congratulations Nick on your fine win in Constance's wonderful contest....:)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/18/2011 7:09:00 AM

Nick, Congratulations on your win! Enjoyed this entry the first time I read it and liked it even more upon the second reading. Love, Carolyn

Elaine George

Date: 2/18/2011 12:43:00 AM

Great story, Nick. Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Lainie

Tahera Mannan

Date: 2/17/2011 8:39:00 PM

Wow Nick Lovely. many congratulations.

Robert Pettit

Date: 2/17/2011 7:19:00 PM

A great example of a diminished hexaverse and a great entry for Constance's contest. Congratulations on winning.

John Freeman

Date: 2/17/2011 6:37:00 PM

Congratulations Nick on your honored place, jolly goood show. Agape, Moses

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 2/17/2011 5:51:00 PM

Congratulations on the well deserved win in the contest of constance, Nick

Audrey Haick

Date: 2/17/2011 5:21:00 PM

Congratulations on your fine win in the "Among the Dead" Contest, Nick. Always, Annalise

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 2/17/2011 5:09:00 PM

Congrats Nick on your wonderful win in Among the Dead contest with this exceptional entry luv.. enjoy another grand victory with luv myf riend..

Cas Davis

Date: 1/22/2011 3:20:00 PM

Y, thank u 4 u'r comments. I like this one, ravens are very symbolic. Anything that symbolic, enriches poetry, I think.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/21/2011 9:24:00 AM

Nick, I love how you did yours using this diminished hexaverse form. I have tried this form once or twice and found it very interesting. It was a great way to accomplish your message here in this poem! You were thinking similarly to me in the way you imagined the scene of this beautiful picture! Luv, Andrea

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 1/19/2011 10:06:00 AM

Nice use of the diminished hexaverse with this poem. You captured the mood of the captivating photograph. This form, when presented centered reminds me of a tornado...and death of a loved one is like an emotional tornado to those left behind. Good luck in the contest. Lovingly, Dane Ann

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/18/2011 7:16:00 PM

Nick, this is a genuinely moving interpretation of the contest theme. And I admire the form you chose. It's not wordy and still conveys a powerful image. Well done! Best wishes for success in the contest. Love, Carolyn

Constance La France

Date: 1/18/2011 10:48:00 AM

Thank you for supporting my contest.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/18/2011 8:21:00 AM

Good morning and thank you for sharing your poetry Nick. It was a pleasure to read your poetry today and I hope you will continue to write. The best to you in your writing endeavors whatever they may be in 2011. Love, Carol

Stephen Parker

Date: 1/18/2011 6:57:00 AM

Utilizing a lurking, watchful bird to describe a human vigil works very well! I enjoyed your devoted verse!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/18/2011 5:16:00 AM

Elegantly expressed Nick and a sure winner as Constance will luv this entry .. perfectly written my friend.. good luck in the contest... with luv..

Tahera Mannan

Date: 1/18/2011 5:08:00 AM

This is a real beauty Nick. You have beautifully described the pic.