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Rain, Rain come my way - Poetry Contest Sponsor: binibining P.iNk Hold me as I await the turmoil that proceeds my sorrowful downpour beneath. A flash of regret sinks under the tunnel and barricades my refreshing nightfall showers of remorse. Outside I found a puddle. It seemed sad yet elated. It knew my pain and wanted to reassure me that a brisk cleansing would do me some good. No matter the season I seem to find much comfort in the washing away of my sins. Rain may come, and rain may go but the one thing that remains is the strength it carries. Mother nature has freely given me a reason to reveal my desires for pain. Showers of sincerity flood my actions as the streams form a river of grief. There are shadows crawling under the pond created from my tears. As the rain falls, so do my consequences and later in the night I am no longer aloud to speak. My words are gathered in a wishing well and as the sweet petrichor arises my voice returns. There are tempests and tornadoes among me, but I need the rain to over shadow my tears. That way, no one knows my pain. A new day arrives and I am beginning to realize the purification I receive as the salt pours from my eyes. They fall as does the rain, and I rise as does the sun. Date Written: June 5, 2016

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Date: 7/6/2016 8:43:00 AM
Congrats Laura, for your WIN with this lovely piece!! ;-)
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Date: 7/6/2016 5:14:00 AM
Back to say Congratulations on your win, Laura:)
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Date: 7/5/2016 2:42:00 PM
You gave a life to rain uniquely your own, Laura ! What a wonderful poem!
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Lu Loo
Date: 7/5/2016 3:59:00 PM
Thank you Carrie :)-luloo
Date: 7/5/2016 12:44:00 PM
Big congrats to you, Laura! Your take on rain was something that I enjoyed, especially with the metaphors that you used. I really liked how you used several bodies of water here and relating them with rain and emotions in life. I like how your last lines also gives hope and inspiration. Thank you for entering my contest :)!
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Lu Loo
Date: 7/5/2016 1:08:00 PM
wow, thank you so much for my placement! I am honored, have a blessed day :)-luloo
Date: 7/5/2016 11:48:00 AM
The pic nice and great writing. Congrats :)
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Date: 6/8/2016 3:34:00 AM
Excellent write with absolutely stunning metaphors:) loved these lines the best -"There are tempests and tornadoes among me, but I need the rain to over shadow my tears. That way, no one knows my pain." Glad you ended it in a positive way:)
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Lu Loo
Date: 6/8/2016 2:59:00 PM
thank you very much Jo :)-luloo
Date: 6/6/2016 11:05:00 PM
Laura, I enjoyed seeing how you did your rain poem. I think Nikko likes metaphors. I did mine like a metaphor for sorrow , just haven't posted it yet. I think that is the best way to do this theme. Not to take it literally. Good thinking!!
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Lu Loo
Date: 6/7/2016 12:40:00 PM
thank you sweet lady Andrea! have a blessed day :)-luloo
Date: 6/5/2016 3:31:00 PM
I love the images brought fourth amongst the tempests and tornadoes overshadowing the pain...we all await that new day...just lovely Luloo...I am inspired to write something now...hugs and thank you for this piece.
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Lu Loo
Date: 6/5/2016 7:35:00 PM
thank you Tim -luloo
Date: 6/5/2016 2:58:00 PM
This entry is excellent luloo! I could relate to your powerful metaphors and the pain. All behind me several years ago, but I still love the rain for its ability to cleans and heal. Your ending is superb! This is sure to be high on the winner's list my fried! # ; )
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Lu Loo
Date: 6/5/2016 4:21:00 PM
awww thanks Connie, you sweet lady you :)-luloo
Date: 6/5/2016 1:43:00 PM
Tears of passion refreshes always. Excellently done. Best of luck with a clean 7. Loved always, bl
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Lu Loo
Date: 6/5/2016 2:15:00 PM
thank you BL :)-luloo
Date: 6/5/2016 1:26:00 PM
I found the end of the poem so uplifting LuLoo I predict a winner here it is truly beautiful:-) hugs Jan xx7
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Lu Loo
Date: 6/5/2016 2:14:00 PM
really? Thank you so much sweet lady, that made my day extra special. Isn't it funny how such mall thing can make someone smile? Thanks -luloo :)

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