Rabbit Hole

She gazed into the rabbit hole And screamed as severed hands appeared, They twitched and grabbed and pulled her down; The hands were kinder than she’d feared, And helped her trim her hair and beard. For Deb’s Dream contest (inspired by the first picture)

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Robin Davis

Date: 5/29/2014 11:04:00 PM

Jack This is creative and fun. You gave me a fright then a laugh. Thank you for the nice comment on my Blue Eyes poem. BTW Blake is a country singer with some great songs.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/6/2013 2:34:00 PM

hahaha,I should have done like you and gone for "funny" INstead I spent three hours on a poem she didn't even like!! haha. congrats, my friend!!

Skat A

Date: 8/6/2013 9:49:00 AM

Jack, a nice winning poem :-) Congrats... love ~SKAT~ ..

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 8/5/2013 8:42:00 PM

Congrats on your win! Laura :)

Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/5/2013 8:19:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Jack Hope you have been doing okay. Love, Joyce

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/5/2013 7:54:00 PM

an awesome win Jack...Congratulations, In DG's "Dream On" contest... xox~ LINDA

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/5/2013 6:41:00 PM

Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 7/24/2013 9:18:00 PM

A wild dream or was that the beer talking? Did not see the picture so not sure what this is pertaining too. Thanks for asking I have been having a good summer. The weather has been beautiful could not ask for a nicer summer. love phyl

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/23/2013 11:37:00 PM

Hello Jack, love it... hope she does not fall in..but i know how this story turns out.. LOL, love the poem.. and hope you are well... Have not seen you around... love..Linda

Audrey Haick

Date: 7/21/2013 9:36:00 PM

LOL! What riotous humor you have, Jack...definitely a winner in my book...x Annalise

Russell Sivey

Date: 7/20/2013 9:49:00 PM

This is a very creative write my friend! I really loved the intriguing story you wove here! I truly enjoyed reading this fantastic poem this evening! What a remarkable piece, such a dynamic poem, Great Work!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/20/2013 2:49:00 PM

trim her hair and beard? OH MY. She is a bearded lady then!! I need to go see that picture. WEll, Jack. Time is going too fast today. it's all I can do to catch up here. Hope to get to emails later!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/20/2013 1:33:00 PM

That was some more wild dream..Reads like a winner to me..Got a chuckle..Thanks for the visits to my work..Sara

Debbie Duncan

Date: 7/20/2013 12:59:00 PM

love it ,, it will win no doubt. I wrote one called Rabbit Hole ;} thank you for reading my " Hollow Bones" she took it in different direction. I read to her to encourage her to read and write ;} have a great day Jack.

John Posey

Date: 7/20/2013 10:39:00 AM

Cleverly crafted and fits the picture very well... should place well in the contest... Jake....