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Quetzalcoatl's Return

* For Carol Brown's Story Time Contest Feathered serpent was more than an Aztec legend Depicted in multihued native art Sculptures, paintings adorned humid cities Spiritual sketches messages impart Quetzalcoatl, a venerated god Plumed leader was said to have sailed away Prophecies forecast this spirit’s return Devout Aztecs’ hopes soared one Holy Thursday The Aztec natives knew no greed Great joy spread quickly in the Yucatan When eleven Spanish ships reached their land Not Quetzalcoatl, just a European man Aztec leader Moctezuma II believed Hernando Cortez to be their long-awaited god At Moctezuma’s command, bounties were gathered And to the shore, joyful natives did plod 1519, the Cortez armada Greeted by Aztec envoys bearing gifts But Spaniards fired shots at their welcoming party Pious souls ascended through tropical mist The land-grabbing perpetrator’s intent revealed Aggression from one who sought to conquer Paying no heed to Moctezuma’s beliefs Or the spiritual history of Aztec culture Ungodly Cortez enslaved those who remained Defiantly built cathedrals adorned by bells Aztec spirits will rise on Judgment Day To claim seats in heaven while Cortez endures hell If “gods” without honor lack kind hearts And advocate power instead of grace Promoting war and killing of brethren Then surely devotion has been misplaced *The arrival of Hernando Cortez marked the end of a thriving Aztec culture. The natives mistook him for a “god” named Quetzalcoatl who had sailed away promising to return. Quetzalcoatl is pronounced ket-zel-cot-el.

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Date: 10/28/2010 8:26:00 AM
To write information in a rhyming poetic form makes me stand aghast-beautifully written an enchantment-and also you give your point of view -much going on, an interesting read on many levels. Its a poem of intense brightness, this has illuminated my soul to be honest.
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Date: 9/27/2010 11:55:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this wonder write, I enjoyed the read. Caryl
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Date: 9/26/2010 9:04:00 PM
A thrilling and beautiful story. The art you have put into it is inspirational. Many congratulations dear friend.
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Date: 9/26/2010 4:39:00 PM
Congratulations on this fine win in the contest, Carolyn
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Date: 9/26/2010 4:29:00 PM
Congratulations on this history story. Congraltualtions on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/26/2010 3:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your 6th Place win in my Story Time contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/17/2010 3:40:00 AM
Reminds of Sydney Spencer's "Columbus" and his imagery of the "doom laden caravan". Do you ever teach mythology ... you know I use myth a lot in my poetic imagery ... cleverly disguised of course, but it is what draws me to your poems and make you one of my favorite poets.
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Date: 9/16/2010 6:06:00 AM
Bravo Carolyn, such a strong storyline here on topic I know you know well from having read your book that I could not put down! You take us on miniature history lesson into something I have never been taught before yet offers intrigue... A delightful piece once more! Kindest thoughts and thanks for your comments, Anna-Marie.
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Date: 9/15/2010 9:11:00 AM
Hi Carolyn, haven't been much on soup and think I missed a lot of poetry. Was too much concentrated on my book-manuscript. Yes, I know that story quite well and Cortez would have been a criminal in our days. Greaat tribute, Carolyn, thank you for posting it!!! And thank you for your kind comment on my poem. Yes, sometimes I see me flying in my dreams, what an experience! ...Hope your leg will heal soon!...Love, Gert
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Date: 9/14/2010 9:47:00 PM
Loved this poem, very real! Thanks for reading my poetry....Benaminis...MJ's song Ben, the rodent...hence, Benaminis!
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Date: 9/14/2010 2:14:00 AM
Carolyn what an stunningly worded as welL, enjoyed you Bio entry for Carol's contest.. All the best to you, love Wilma
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Date: 9/13/2010 2:50:00 PM
WOW, Im speechless. You are a true poet in every meaning of the word....Everything I write seems like dribble to this lol....love Michael
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Date: 9/13/2010 10:40:00 AM
This power packed poetic thesis is exactly how I love to read history Carolyn ! Concisely done to my thankful short fused brain ! *smiles* much love dear, james
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Date: 9/13/2010 10:15:00 AM
Interesting historical information penned...Good luck in the contest..Keep the creative pen flowing...Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work about the beans..They will also help to lower cholesterol...The fiberous content absorbs some of the fat that you eat and carries it out in the feces...This is true of all fiberous foods including oatmeal..Sara
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Date: 9/13/2010 7:29:00 AM
May Cortez, wherever in hell he is at, eat a bushel of hot peppers and suffer Moctezuma's revenge. Great write. Sorry to hear you are still having some troubles. I hope fishing was good. Love, Dave
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Date: 9/12/2010 11:36:00 PM
Well what can one say here? you are so astute, such knowledge. i often feel for the lost civilizations of the planet, them the victims of genocide. love this Carolyn, good luck in the contest. Harry
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Date: 9/12/2010 9:11:00 PM
Beautiful story Carolyn and a bit of history here. Very sad. but a sure winner. Thank you for your comments. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/12/2010 5:40:00 PM
Soup mail. I really enjoyed the nice ending with the last quatrain, Carolyn.
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Date: 9/12/2010 5:28:00 PM
~ "Much Love & Warmth Always to You & Your Loves," John! ~ Smile, "Have A Very Blessed & Beautiful Evening 'Dear Precious Carloyn Devonshire,' Amid The Bright Promises of, 'An Eternities Everlasting Love;'" Bye Dear Lady!:) ~
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Date: 9/12/2010 5:24:00 PM
~ Far beyond The Pearly Gates his fate, for his cowardly darkened deeds, so sadly spun!! What a turn of histories pages 'gun powder' brought upon humanity for, not only were the Aztecas it victims but also the great Zulus of Africa, along with its beautiful people & nation; but of course, it took blind & heartless humans to pull the triggers!! Smile, I have missed "Your Brightness Dear" &, its good to see "Your Loveliness" again ~ ....Cont:)
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Date: 9/12/2010 5:23:00 PM
We studied this in school and it really was horrible how the Aztecs thought Cortez was this returning god when he only came to conquer and enslave the tribes. Very good! Good luck in the contest. Diane
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Date: 9/12/2010 5:15:00 PM
~ The indigent people of South America including what is now called Mexico until, they were finally overthrown and yet not before a new people were born: "Viva La Raza" ~ Smile, "Hello Beautiful, Talented & Precious Carolyn Devonshire" ~ What a wonderfully presented yet sad story, this reminder of a time not that long ago truly; and "Yes," many of those beautiful souls shall return someday I do believe & as for Cortez himself, I am sure his eternal regretful fate does await ~ ....Cont:)
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Date: 9/12/2010 5:04:00 PM
Smile? ~ "Yes," quite a sorrow amid histories moments within time! And "Your Treasures" presented this tale pretty much verbatim as the pages do note and yet, the majority of Aztecas casualties did not succumb unto gun, sword or spear but unto illness & disease brought upon they by their lack of immunity towards the Spaniards virus' of which they brought along with appalling deeds and, for three hundred years they ruled ~ ....Cont:)
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Date: 9/12/2010 3:52:00 PM
It's a great Bio written with true historical accuracy. I have enjoyed reading it with consuming interest. I wish good luck in the contest, Carolyn. Thanks for your encouraging and delightful comments. Have a wonderful Sunday. Love and admiration, Andrew.
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Date: 9/12/2010 3:13:00 PM
Neil Young wrote a great track called 'Cortez the Killer' it's well worth listening to whilst reading this awesome poem Carolyn. The haunting electric guitar takes you back to the slaughter. Good luck in Carol's contest ;) x
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