Polar

You are nothing but electricity I am the ground to drag you in, It should be the other way But you follow me. I see the lightning shadows everywhere I look. And thank you for the feeling. All my hair stands on end. My teeth are vibrating. Ive never felt so alive. You are all action and noise I am the sea to hold you in, It shouldnt be this easy But I love you. I feel you thrash against my waves. And thank you for the timing. My body will envelope you. Your soul is my anti-filter. Ive never felt so alive.

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Jay Loveless

Date: 11/14/2013 7:41:00 AM

Damn powerful. I like it!

Gina Young
Date: 11/14/2013 6:38:00 PM

:) Thank u again friend.

Karen Anglesey

Date: 6/19/2013 8:57:00 AM

Your descriptions really make the poem alive. Love the comparisons to electricity and a little crazy added into the mix. Energetic all the way through :)

Gina Young
Date: 7/1/2013 4:23:00 PM

Thank u much Karen!! And yes, definitely some crazy in there (and in most of my writing!). Will come by ur page soon :)

Kyle Kriticos

Date: 6/17/2013 2:47:00 PM

Your poem is extremely enticing. I dig your style Gina! 7!

Gina Young
Date: 7/1/2013 4:22:00 PM

Thank u soo much Kyle! Im not on here a lot but promise to stop by and give u a read!

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 6/9/2013 4:35:00 AM

one word beautiful Shadow x

Gina Young
Date: 6/9/2013 7:32:00 PM

thank you!!

Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/7/2013 12:57:00 AM

This cut right to the quick... powerful wording, my friend! One feels truly alive when brushing against death. The person you describe sounds like a keeper... a slice of crazy is better than a slice of monotony, methinks!

Gina Young
Date: 6/7/2013 7:05:00 PM

Thank you! And I agree, dancing with death is a very quick way to invigorate a life. And yes, I will keep the slice of crazy lol :)