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Point of No Return

Point of no return 7pm All the boys arrive at the sports bar/pub 7:30pm The championship game begins, first round of drinks 8:00pm 2nd round of beers, Johnny pays is in good mood 8:15pm Hometown team scores ahead 1-0 crowd goes wild 8:30pm Bill buys a round of shots for everyone, mood is high 8:45pm Hometown team scores again 2-0, sense of victory in the air 9:00pm Celebration starts with 3rd round of beers 9:15pm Visitors score silences the multitude of spectators 9:30pm Hometown team scores room erupts in applause 9:45pm Chanting Victory another round of beers, Bobby pays 10:00pm Visitors score 2 goals in quick succession, panic sets in 10:15pm Nervous customers swill shots awaiting final minute 10:30pm Final minute hometown score, win championship final 4-3 10:45pm Jeff buys round of shots in victory celebration. 11:00pm Everyone feels like a champion, decide to go home feeling good 11:15pm Johnny, Billy, Bobby, Jeff, get in the car together 11:16pm Johnny puts the key in the ignition 11:17pm Johnny drives drunk- kills everyone. 11:16pm Was the point of no return. For Nicolas point of no return contest December10,2016

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Winged Warrior

Date: 12/15/2016 5:16:00 PM

Congrats!!! my friend John...very well constructed Didactic...god bless...^WW^

John Hamilton
Date: 12/15/2016 10:17:00 PM

Thanks WW, nice to see you flying high again on the soup!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/11/2016 3:34:00 AM

It is so important to plan ahead to have a designated driver or a place where everyone can just stay after a party where they've been drinking. Often the young think they're invincible and they can't be reasoned with after they've had several drinks. They think they're perfectly able to drive. Your poem brings that fact to light with chilling veracity John. I am so thankful that none of my four children drink. A great entry John! ; ) 7

John Hamilton
Date: 12/11/2016 12:27:00 PM

Thanks Connie much appreciated.

Casarah Nance

Date: 12/10/2016 5:06:00 PM

Sadly too many loose lives by drinking and driving, no one wins, hugs

John Hamilton
Date: 12/11/2016 12:26:00 PM

Thanks Cas so true.

Heidi Sands

Date: 12/10/2016 11:12:00 AM

Wow John. That is a strong message. Well done. Good luck in the contest :)

John Hamilton
Date: 12/10/2016 1:36:00 PM

Thanks Heidi

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/10/2016 11:12:00 AM

WoW! John, you've penned a sad yet well written take on the contest theme. Drinking and driving is never good. You expressed that fact very well in this clever piece. It reads like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis

John Hamilton
Date: 12/10/2016 1:36:00 PM

Thanks Alexis.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/10/2016 10:41:00 AM

A sad tale very well told. Good luck in the contest.

John Hamilton
Date: 12/10/2016 10:55:00 AM

Thanks Richard, it seems like here in Canada it's still an epidemic, keeps happening, wow!

Paloma P

Date: 12/10/2016 10:25:00 AM

Kind of saw that coming, happens all often in reality, a moving depiction John.

John Hamilton
Date: 12/10/2016 10:54:00 AM

Thanks Paloma.