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Below is the poem entitled POACHING FROST which was written by poet Monterey Sirak. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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"Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down."
				        Robert Frost

I need the freedom to serve words into a space 
with no boundaries    where they can pick up nuances     
threads of a new thought    before being lobbed back 
by a poet with a different spin 
Backhanded emotions reveal multifaceted depths 
that have no danger of becoming entangled in the net
there to hang indefinitely    never felt by others 
I would miss the volley of letters 
			back and forth 
back and forth 
adhering to each other and forming new words 
then breaking away to rejoin elsewhere

Give me a poem with no faults    no rushing the net 
to force feelings that may not have existed 
I like poaching    hitting the words out of turn 
smack them with a solid blow to see what pops out 
I want no limitations    no syllable cut off on 
the creak of a door    the squish of a knife 
biting into a ripe tomato    the sound of a sigh 
I crave words with no obvious rhyme 
like pomegranate and Elderhostel
They stand firm on individuality  

Allow me to play free with the verses 
with the aplomb of a young girl 
dressing up in mother's garden hat 
and grandmother's vintage girdle

The quote by Frost, who is a guiding poet for me, inspired this poem in defense of free verse. 

Copyright © Monterey Sirak

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  1. Date: 8/1/2013 10:24:00 PM
    A beautiful self-fulfilling prophecy. I've personally been relishing in random structures, but after reading this, I feel like sprawling out on my poetry blanket a bit. :) Thanks for your work.

  1. Date: 7/31/2013 8:16:00 PM
    Wow! I never thought free verse could bedescribed like this, but now I see how fun it can be. You truly have a unique way of writing, and made free verse and poetry reveal to me in a whole new way. I'm going to try writing it sometime, since I've never tried. You truly have a unique way of writing. In defense of rhyming poetry though, it can be challenging to write and fun to read, and it also contains another kind of beauty free verse cannot portray! You should definitely try it sometime, if you haven't already :)

  1. Date: 7/31/2013 9:45:00 AM
    You have an amazing gift... stay true to your unique essence and play tennis with the net down... let the pomegranates and ripe tomatoes leap in anywhere your heart desires...spectacular :)

  1. Date: 7/31/2013 8:08:00 AM
    Excellent reply in defence,,, free verse great poetry style,, and this poem show the skill to let your words explode onto paper,, well done great writing, blessings Use ellen

  1. Date: 7/30/2013 3:12:00 PM
    Okay!!!!!! How can I say that I love this poem poet, you my friend are so talented, please do not waste this outstanding talent. Excellent poem poet you and Drake are two of my favorites I have others but you two are among them. great great great poetry

  1. Date: 7/28/2013 8:06:00 AM
    It's difficult enough for a new poet to even express themselves in a complete sentence, let alone in a method that won't be deftly criticized by those who used to be in the same shoes. Poetry is heart, sight, & soul. That's where it needs to come from. Setting rules, for fun, no problem. But, to be ridiculed for it, go away. I love what you did here with this. What tremendous lines & images! Stanzas are the key, for unlocking our hearts to be free.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes
    Date: 7/28/2013 12:01:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Im....not even sure what the roots of this poem are. This is my first time reading her work. I just commented based on what I read, that was it. I wasnt aware of anything more behind it. So, Im not sure which words you mean. So, no apology needed.
    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/28/2013 10:56:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi Drake, I sincerely hope that my words were not taken as malice or for the purpose of being critical. That would never be my intention. I do not see myself as being more knowledgeable or skilled, Monterey is one of my favorites. Part of being on the soup is to challenge each other to grow and spread our wings. If my words cause offence I apologies. Not my intention
  1. Date: 7/27/2013 7:15:00 PM
    Excellent poem! :)

  1. Date: 7/27/2013 5:59:00 PM
    welcome back, monterey... you outdid yourself with this inimitable free verse.... finely expressed!.:) hugggs

  1. Date: 7/27/2013 12:44:00 PM
    :) lovely!!

  1. Date: 7/27/2013 11:53:00 AM
    This is such a cool premise, especially employing spacing instead of punctuation(I obsess about punctuation and have found the spacing technique to be a needed break, a fresh foray in a new direction). Yes, this poem is a good defense of free verse -- nice to see, especially since I will always defend free verse as well.

  1. Date: 7/27/2013 11:46:00 AM
    I enjoyed this one a lot except, here comes the except, The change to the vegatable metiphor part way through did not work for me. Up to that point I thought the poem was brilliant. It may be because I am a tennis player and watcher I was really enjoying where you were going with this one.

  1. Date: 7/27/2013 10:41:00 AM
    very descriptive and beautifully put. and thank you for your comment on my Silent Few.

  1. Date: 7/27/2013 9:17:00 AM
    by the way, my take on the opposite view point is called "Inside this Little Room" page 24 of my poetry pages posted 2/23/2010 Also came back here to FAVE this one.

  1. Date: 7/27/2013 9:09:00 AM
    this is AMAZING. I am completely your opposite (but not by CHOICE) I think God just wired me differently. I love the rules of having to stay within spaces because it keeps me focused and is the primary attribute of the sonnet form which I adore. But I agree with you, forcing lines SUCKS, and I think a good sonneteer knows how NOT to do that. If I was wired the way you are, I too would be in love with writing free verse. When I do it, however, it comes out lyrical or narrative style anyway!!!

  1. Date: 7/27/2013 8:54:00 AM
    I enjoy the imagery throughout this poem. very well done. hugs, catie :)

  1. Date: 7/27/2013 7:41:00 AM
    Well, Im ashamed of my tribute to Frost after reading yours. should have a big win here. BG