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Outside My Window

9/21/15 Outside my window : new poet only contest Sponsor by Bev Smith Stream hush a silent night, a wooden boat at its Coastline. Leaves are dancing to the air's drum while crested auklets are the musicians. As I stayed by my window watching how weather was quiver As the sky was about to cry and lighten cracked it fire. Birds flew off the stream and red palulu and Walking iris leaves spread upon the stream. They beautified the boat as ornate object A comical changed of climate as it all of a sudden bright And a restrained of the rain. Mantle of the sun spread.

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Date: 11/3/2015 6:47:00 PM
This is excellent my friend you should have been NO 1.
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Date: 10/13/2015 7:38:00 AM
longest time friend. You've just exhibited to the highest quality exactly what I have missed in here for months. Your lines are so exciting and your words are each having that second hand of drawing me back to them again and again and again irrespective of how many times I have gone through them. Its nice to be home and you are part of the reason I have this refreshing feeling. A definite 7. Cheers!
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Date: 9/30/2015 1:55:00 PM
Afolabi, really nice, very descriptive write. Well done!
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Date: 9/28/2015 11:48:00 PM
Very wonderful take on the theme Afolabi! Congrats on a fantastic win!
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Date: 9/28/2015 11:01:00 PM
Afolabi, Congrats in Bev Smith's, contest. Hugs **SKAT**
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Date: 9/28/2015 10:12:00 PM
Congratulations Afolabi on your win.
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Date: 9/24/2015 8:24:00 PM
Your words painted such wonderful images throughout this poem... Great writing, Afolabi. Good luck in Bev's contest!
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Date: 9/23/2015 9:08:00 AM
I just saw out your window and the view was magnificent. Great poem,good luck in that contest.A7
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Date: 9/22/2015 2:15:00 PM
This is beautiful, AM. I think you nailed the contest with this entry. This is poetry... :-)
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 9/22/2015 2:54:00 PM
Thank you very much for your pleasant comment I really appreciate it.
Date: 9/22/2015 10:05:00 AM
You did a wonderful job here, I read it several times and it slowly came alive for me. Emile.
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 9/22/2015 12:25:00 PM
I appreciate your kind comment Emile. Thanks for shopping.
Date: 9/22/2015 9:13:00 AM
Sorry about that I wanted to tell you good luck in the contest but with this poem I think will win without any trouble at all, cheri
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 9/22/2015 12:23:00 PM
Thanks for your love Cherl. Stay blessed.
Date: 9/22/2015 9:11:00 AM
Dear Afolabi Muideen Now this poem of yours to me forgive the pon but it's what i would like to see if I looked out the window of life, the beauty and power of your words reflect such mystical excellece of nature, love itcheri
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 9/22/2015 12:22:00 PM
Thank you very much for your kind comment Cherl I really appreciate it.
Date: 9/22/2015 7:29:00 AM
Thankyou for letting me gaze outside your window, a beautiful scene indeed, and so the sound of music.
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 9/22/2015 12:19:00 PM
I do appreciate your kind words and thanks for gaze outside my window with me.... Stay blessed.
Date: 9/22/2015 6:45:00 AM
Very poetic work..I enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for stopping by...Sara
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 9/22/2015 12:17:00 PM
Thank you Sara. I love your kind comment.
Date: 9/22/2015 5:35:00 AM
Outside the window your inspiration came and carried you on her lofty wings, making you the poet you are, dear A.M!
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 9/22/2015 12:16:00 PM
Thank you very much Demetrios I really appreciate your kind comment.
Date: 9/21/2015 11:08:00 AM
AM , this is lovely and thanks for visiting my poem, nothing ...
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 9/22/2015 12:13:00 PM
Thank you for you comment I do appreciate it.

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