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Open Field - Visual 7

Open Field - Visual 7 Bold tree Consumes landscape Cries on soft green carpet Tears rain on branches in the wind Grass sings Create on 1/12/15 for – Andrea Dietrich’s “An American Beauty: Write Like Adelaide” Poetry Contest - (cinquain form 2,4,6,8,2 syllable count)

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Skat A

Date: 2/1/2015 2:31:00 PM

EARL, CONGRATULATIONS on your win *Love Sweet* SKAT

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 1/28/2015 9:55:00 AM

I love the exceptional imagery and personification, Earl...you really brought the picture to life! Congrats!! Hugs, Rhonda

Earl Schumacker
Date: 1/28/2015 11:44:00 AM

Hi Rhonda, I appreciate your comments. It took a great deal of effort to keep the words on the page in their right place. They were running all over the place like lost children in a blizzard. I could only use small young words for such a short poem.... You know how it is... Thank you for all your kind words! Have a great day. Earl

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/26/2015 3:47:00 PM

!!! : > )...Way to go..Sara

Earl Schumacker
Date: 1/28/2015 11:46:00 AM

Hi Sara. Thank you for commenting. I appreciate it. Have a pleasant day. Take care. Earl

Arlene Smith

Date: 1/25/2015 7:37:00 PM

Absolutely stunning, dear friend.. Congrats on a great win.. Hugs.. Arlene

Earl Schumacker
Date: 1/25/2015 8:02:00 PM

Hi Arlene, Thank you so much. I just rated you a 7 for your poem. You should have scored a #1, based on my personal observations. Congratulations to you too on your excellent win in the contest. Earl

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/25/2015 3:40:00 PM

very visual description and lovely metaphors here, Earl. The last line, Grass sings. That was breathtaking. Congrats.

Earl Schumacker
Date: 1/25/2015 7:19:00 PM

Hi Andrea, Thank you so much for sponsoring this challenging contest and for your generous response. Glad you liked my entry. Earl

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/25/2015 3:28:00 PM

I enjoyed your wining poem Earl!

Earl Schumacker
Date: 1/25/2015 7:52:00 PM

Thank you so much Richard. I appreciate your commenting. Have a great night. Earl

Sandra Haight

Date: 1/25/2015 3:18:00 PM

Earl, congratulations to you for your win for the nicely imaged poem based on that visual. Sandra

Earl Schumacker
Date: 1/25/2015 7:51:00 PM

Thank you so much Sandra. Glad you liked it. Take care. Earl

Jan Allison

Date: 1/25/2015 1:42:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Earl:-) Hugs Jan xx

Earl Schumacker
Date: 1/25/2015 7:50:00 PM

Hi Jan, Thank you. Congratulations on your great poem and great win in this contest. Take care. Earl

Jan Allison

Date: 1/12/2015 3:10:00 PM

Beautiful imagery Earl good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 1/12/2015 5:15:00 PM

Its amazing how much of an impact you can make in a few sweet words Earl - I too love these short challenges:-) Hugs Jan xx

Earl Schumacker
Date: 1/12/2015 4:54:00 PM

Hi Jan, These short poems are a challenge. I want the rain to take on a happy personality by singing, as a juxtaposition to the crying tree as it fills up and fills in the landscape and I want the sun to maneuver the streams of rain between the light beams and bands or hard elements of the rain as it drinks in both sun and tears. Maybe I'll just make another poem and go wild with ideas. Have a great night. Earl