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One Tired Torso One tired torso stands and sits, reeling from its aching hips. The lumbar vertebrae are all but gone, with femur bones that are old and worn. A pelvis full that bore two baby girls, is now a barren and empty world. A gnarled patella is the mark, of the many prayers said in the dark. But it’s the feet that tell the story, whether life was grind or glory. Swollen talus and bent distal phalanges, only a hard earned living understands these. Heel spurs from years walking and standing, in a challenging job, very demanding. Both feet have severe plantar fasciitis, the entire framework has osteoarthritis. Old bones know all your life's true tale. All they do at this juncture is wail. You may say this body needs to rest, but it still strives for mankind’s best. 9/9/16 Body Parts in Poem Torso Hips Lumbar vertebrae Femur bones Pelvis Patella Feet Talus Distal phalanges (toes-tips) heels

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Date: 10/7/2016 5:16:00 PM
SO SO entertaining and such a clever way of weaving in the body parts - many congrats Janis:-) hugs Jan xx
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Janis Thompson
Date: 10/7/2016 6:43:00 PM
Thanks, Jan.
Date: 10/7/2016 8:39:00 AM
Nicely written, Janis! And, and I can relate very well :( Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/7/2016 6:44:00 PM
Thanks, Sandra
Date: 10/7/2016 7:58:00 AM
well done Janis! congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 10/7/2016 6:45:00 PM
Thanks, Luloo
Date: 10/7/2016 4:38:00 AM
Greetings Janis. I really enjoyed your captivating and educational verses!! Congrats for your placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Date: 10/7/2016 12:31:00 AM
Apart from the pelvis that bore two baby girls, this could be me, Janis. Congrats on a fine write, well done! Viv x
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Date: 10/7/2016 6:46:00 PM
Thanks Viv. Great idea for a contest. The suspense was killing me.
Date: 9/11/2016 9:07:00 PM
wow, YOURS ROCKS. One of the best in the body poems!!
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Janis Thompson
Date: 9/14/2016 12:50:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea.
Date: 9/9/2016 9:55:00 PM
A great job, Janis - thoroughly clever and entertaining! Good luck in all things ... CayCay
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Janis Thompson
Date: 9/10/2016 1:22:00 PM
Thanks, CayCay.
Date: 9/9/2016 3:28:00 PM
Makes me tired just reading it, Janis. Kinda reminds me of that old song,"The hip bone's connected to the... leg bone" Lol I enjoyed this poem.
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Janis Thompson
Date: 9/9/2016 6:57:00 PM
Thanks Daniel. Love your avatar. A cutie.
Date: 9/9/2016 3:07:00 PM
Janis I enjoyed your poetry Lots of people have planter fasciitis. A good read
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Date: 9/9/2016 6:58:00 PM
Thanks Darlene. I appreciate your stopping by....

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