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One More Day

If I just had one more day, There’s so much I would do and say, To show you my love before you went away, I cant believe your really not here, Every time I think about it I shed a tear, Daddy you were my life, Now it’s like I want to die, I don’t think you really knew, How much I truly cherished you, It’s hard to wake up everyday, Knowing I’m not able to see your face, It breaks my heart, That we are this far apart, I never thought you would leave, And it’s way harder then you would believe, It still feels like a bad dream, But it never seems to be relieved, I love you more then you could know, Now permanetly in my heart there is a major hole, There is nothing I wouldn’t do, To spend everyday with you, I miss you so much, This is way to tough, I know your in a better place, So please watch over me and keep me safe, Until we meet again ill be OK...

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Date: 3/19/2014 12:35:00 AM
Reminds me of when my father passed away a little over five years ago. In the fourth line from the bottom, change "to" to "too". You have the incorrect homophone there. In the third line from the bottom, change "your" to either "you're" or "you are". In your last line, you need an apostrophe in "ill". Putting that word there is like saying you are sick. With those little suggested changes, your work becomes more viable.
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