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Once Pocketed

(Inspired by the movie "the Rabbit Hole," starring Nicole Kidman as a woman, along with her husband, dealing with the grief of losing a child.) The weight of it becomes that of a stone; once pocketed, it’s something you can bear. This boulder on your shoulder now your own - the weight of it becomes that of a stone. Time goes. . . You won’t feel always so alone. Although the pain is hidden, it's still there; the weight of it becomes that of a stone! Once pocketed, it’s something you can bear. For Brian Strand's Contest of poems 2, 4, 6 or 8 lines long.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 11/24/2014 7:50:00 PM
"once pocketed it's something you can bear" this line alone could carry this Triolet. Excellent.
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Date: 6/29/2011 4:59:00 AM
A belated congratulations on your win in Brian's contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/8/2011 5:10:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Andrea. Excellent write. Nice going. xxxRalph
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Date: 6/8/2011 3:03:00 PM
Congrats Andrea on a super win in Brian's contest .. such a wonderful write my friend...luv..
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Date: 6/8/2011 2:10:00 PM
Congratulations on the third place win in the contest, Andrea
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Date: 6/8/2011 1:56:00 PM
eyyy, heartie... clap clap for winning so swell with this deeply scribed piece! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 1/24/2011 4:02:00 AM
So seeply profound, Andrea. I must rent that movie. Andrea, I went looking for Frank's poetry and there was nothing there. I sent him a soupmail. Hope he gets it. Lainie
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Date: 1/23/2011 11:58:00 AM
Interesting poem, Andrea. Sometimes I feel like there's an albatross around my neck, but I can't "pocket it." Comments have definitely slowed. There are more members now and more poems being posted. How can anyone keep up with them? I have a football playoff to watch this afternoon, but maybe I'll get to read more tonight. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/23/2011 8:14:00 AM
I haven't seen that movie yet but enjoyed your poem very much, Andrea!....All the best!...Love, Gert
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Date: 1/23/2011 8:08:00 AM
I take it you give my Wonderful Town a 7? Damn! I thought, out of a possible 100, I might get at least a 10. This form - I've said it before - gives impact. You be de one. Love, Dave
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Date: 1/23/2011 7:16:00 AM
Good morning, Andrea,, thanks for the hi... love the inspiration behind your poem,, sure enjoyed.. by the way..is it a new movie.. crazy title~ for a movie Nicole Kidman starrs in.. let me know about the movie.. if its old.. cuirious.. bye for now,..p.d.
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Date: 1/22/2011 6:07:00 PM
I have never seen the movie, but now I have to after seeing this triolet you have written. It looks like a good one. I have sent you soup mail.
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Date: 1/22/2011 4:58:00 PM
Must have been a wonderful story Andrea for such a lovely piece to be created as your Triolette... losing a child.. as I have ... is always in the corner of your mind.. if u let it become that stone it will drag u along life .. but if u celebrate the little life instead it makes both free ... thankxx for sharing this with this beautiful poem my friend..
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Date: 1/22/2011 4:12:00 PM
Very good and very true, Andrea. Yes I've been there. Thank you for your comment about my fly on the wall limerick. Funny thing I had written a long one for him, forgetting I had to write a limerick. I canceled that one and whipped him out another. Everyone doesn't use the same guidelines on these limericks. I wrote this one accoding to Debbie's rules. I think. Love, Joyce
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Date: 1/22/2011 2:47:00 PM
I am learning the meter that I have unlearnt a way back, Andrea
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Date: 1/22/2011 2:39:00 PM
Good work describing what the couple must have gone through...Sara
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Date: 1/22/2011 2:17:00 PM
It was a sad movie.. you captured the feelings from it perfectly my dear... sad write.... with love Michael
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Date: 1/22/2011 2:14:00 PM
The feeling of becoming a mother is always weightless but loosing it.....Andrea, a very cute take
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