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On the Pier

Sun sinking in pastels, kissing the horizon; a familiar vision. Her knees weaken. A special place to them; first kiss shared on this pier. He proposed to her here. Comforting thoughts. As she walks to the end; last time with him to view the evening sea's deep blue, she lifts the urn. Written by Arlene Smith July 09, 2014 Contest: On the pier Sponsor: Nette Onclaud

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Mohan Chutani

Date: 7/15/2014 11:25:00 AM

Arlene, a very sweet touch on the pier, congrats for the fine win. Mohan

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/15/2014 12:27:00 PM

Thank you, dear Mohan.. Hugs.. Arlene

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/15/2014 12:19:00 AM

This is so very lovely Arlene! Loved all three especially the last stanza,, congrats on huge win!

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/15/2014 12:33:00 AM

How sweet! Tank you, Dr. Upma.. Hugs.. Arlene

Greg Hoffman

Date: 7/14/2014 11:23:00 PM

Congrats on your win Arlene with this poem

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/14/2014 11:53:00 PM

Thank you, Gregg! So nice of you to visit.. Hugs.. Arlene

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/14/2014 8:45:00 PM

Aww emotional Well done Arlene grats on your win :)

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/14/2014 9:16:00 PM

Thanks sweet Casarah! Hugs.. Arlene

Faye Gibson

Date: 7/14/2014 2:39:00 PM

Congratulations, Arlene. This has a stunning ending and such tenderness and sadness.

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/14/2014 9:16:00 PM

Thank you so muck dear Faye! hugs.. Arlene

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/14/2014 2:01:00 PM

the ending was definitely jaw-dropping... such a tender read, Arlene.. this deserves a high place in my contest.. sweet congrats and huggs

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/14/2014 2:34:00 PM

Thank you so very much, sweet Nette!.. Hugs.. Arlene

Jan Allison

Date: 7/14/2014 12:01:00 PM

just dropping back with my congratulations - a well deserved winner which I loved the first time I read it. Hugs Jan

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/14/2014 2:33:00 PM

Thank you so much, dear Jan!.. Hugs.. Arlene

Kelly Deschler

Date: 7/13/2014 8:35:00 PM

I was not expecting that ending and it really tugged at my heart.... I enjoyed reading this beautiful and emotional write. Excellent work, Arlene! Good luck in Nette's contest!

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/14/2014 2:32:00 PM

Thank you so much, sweet Kelly!... Hugs.. Arlene

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/13/2014 12:49:00 AM

arlene, I hope you know that my beautiful poem was not about my husband. hahaha. Just in case you didn't know!! That was funny how you said you would live in a tent with your husband. I don't think I would do that with mine. Not with anybody. It would kill my back!!!

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/13/2014 7:38:00 AM

Ooopps!.. Lol.... You know what they say about when one assumes!...... I said I would live in a tent, but I would have to have a mattress!.... :-).. Hugs.. Arlene

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/12/2014 8:30:00 PM

Oh wow.......the ending is a heart stopper! Well done !!

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/12/2014 9:18:00 PM

Thank you so much, Carrie..Hugs.. Arlene

Paul Callus

Date: 7/11/2014 12:05:00 PM

Top rating for this lovely and yet sad ending poem. Well done Arlene! // paul

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/11/2014 5:09:00 PM

Thank you so much, Paul!.. Hugs.. Arlene

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/10/2014 9:26:00 PM

OH MY< this is superb how you made the story. I love your entry!! As for my most beautiful poem. It was not really about the car, it sure played into it!!! Anyway, He could have picked me up on a bike, and I would have been thrilled!!

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/10/2014 9:32:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea!!.. I know what you mean.. I would live in a tent with my husband..

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/10/2014 8:11:00 PM

So very sad but so beautiful a write!!! In fact , a truly wonderful write! Good luck in the contest!!!

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/10/2014 8:46:00 PM

Thank you so much, Robert my friend! Hugs.. Arlene

Robert Johnson

Date: 7/10/2014 8:05:00 PM

Eloquently sweet and sad. Just like life. Peace. :)

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/10/2014 8:45:00 PM

thank you, Robert! Hugs... Arlene

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 7/10/2014 6:48:00 AM

Love it Arlene...:) thoughtful thoughtful one..:)! Hope this place high..:)

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/10/2014 6:54:00 AM

Thank you so much dear Olive.. Hugs.. Arlene

Date: 7/10/2014 6:46:00 AM

Very romantic and sadly. I like. Thank you.

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/10/2014 6:54:00 AM

Thank you so much.. Hugs.. Arlene

Seren Roberts

Date: 7/10/2014 5:00:00 AM

wow Arlene this is truly great, as the others have said a true winner ....Seren

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/10/2014 6:22:00 AM

Thank you so much, Seen!.. Hugs, my friend.. Arlene

John Lawless

Date: 7/9/2014 6:46:00 PM

I shall now withdraw my entry from the contest as I know whose name will fill the top spot. Beautifully conceived and written. Premature congrats, you got my vote.

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/9/2014 7:12:00 PM

I am honored and humbled by your most generous comments, John my friend. Now I shall see this write you threaten to withdraw. Hugs.. Arlene

Robert Nehls

Date: 7/9/2014 5:04:00 PM

This is certainly a hard time but there is a comfort in it too. Very well described and written, Arlene..... Robert.

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/9/2014 5:52:00 PM

thank you for visiting and the nice comments, Robert. hugs.. Arlene

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 7/9/2014 4:15:00 PM

Nicely Arlene... Gl in the contest... Verlena

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/9/2014 5:51:00 PM

thank you, Verlena.. god luck to you too. hugs... Arlene

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/9/2014 2:12:00 PM

That's awesome Arlene ! Gl in contest!

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/9/2014 3:32:00 PM

Thank you so much, Upma... Good luck to you as well!.. Hugs. Arlene

Tim Smith

Date: 7/9/2014 1:41:00 PM

Wow Arlene you painted the perfect picture with ending that is special... Very well done....hugs Tim

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/9/2014 3:31:00 PM

Thank you so much for the encouraging words, Tim.. Hugs.. Arlene

Jan Allison

Date: 7/9/2014 1:35:00 PM

beautifully romantic good luck in the contest. hugs Jan x

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/9/2014 3:28:00 PM

Thank you, Jan.. Good to luck to you as well.. Hugs.. Arlene

Jeremy Street

Date: 7/9/2014 1:32:00 PM

Such Finality In These Words ~ Will They Ever Meet Again ? Their Pelican Cries....KLove *

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/9/2014 3:27:00 PM

Thank you so much for the visit, Jeremy.. Hugs.. Arlene

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 7/9/2014 1:29:00 PM

This is wonderful.. The ending surprised me. This should do well in the contest. Im still struggling with mine. BG

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/9/2014 3:26:00 PM

Thank you, Barbara.. I struggle with all the ones I write for contests.. I am sure something wonderful will come to you. Good luck, my friend.. Hugs.. rlene