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Edge of the War

today I was shopping in a moment found spotless a basket of groceries... a list in my hand.. old music piped in the lyrics forgotten from a favorite rock band today I was shopping when my thoughts interrupted the reach of my hand your face and your laughter popped into my head there on the shelf in the jar of green olives, in the crust of the bread in the provolone cheese a six pack of beer.. of pale summer blend was your face staring back that brought back the years and the hot sting of tears and out of the blue, the moment once spotless is swallowed again by the ghost from before in the aisle of the store on a day I was shopping on the edge of the war I came out of the store stepping into the blue wondering who I was, long before... before there was you __________________________________ Open Poetry Contest: Finalized 7/19/15 Resubmitted for Laura Loo's Contest: 2nd Place Only III

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Date: 7/22/2015 2:54:00 AM
Superb write Carrie! Congrats on awesome win!
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Date: 7/20/2015 1:50:00 PM
Such poignant write, Carrie. Congrats!
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Date: 7/20/2015 8:14:00 AM
Carrie, you again pull my heartstrings.. love the recollection of moments... !beautiful!congrats!~Olive Eloisa
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Date: 7/20/2015 5:29:00 AM
OH, Carrie, an eloquently perfect description of those moments, those flashbacks triggered by the commonplace movements of living.....filled with traces of the past.
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Date: 7/20/2015 3:44:00 AM
Ah! Carrie! Nostalgia at its very best! Touching, and beautiful! Congratulations on a very merited win. // paul
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Date: 7/19/2015 8:23:00 PM
Great write, Carrie, I think we've all been there at some point, and you paint it so well. Congratulations, Viv x
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Date: 7/19/2015 8:12:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/19/2015 7:45:00 PM
This very old song applies, "It had to be you".....
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Date: 7/19/2015 6:10:00 PM
Carrie,, congratulations in Charlotte Puddifootst... SKAT
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Date: 7/19/2015 2:54:00 PM
consistent quality from you, carrie, and of course you write these bittersweet, nostalgic types of poems so so well, wonderfully evocative - congrats on your win in my contest :)
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Date: 7/19/2015 2:39:00 PM
hauntingly beautiful Carrie many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/12/2015 5:12:00 PM
Carrie, oh so sadly beautiful, you have such a talent 7 and thanks for visiting my pastel reflections
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Date: 7/11/2015 8:43:00 PM
sometimes the simplest things can open the gate to memories, usually they are the deepest memories..good luck in the contest
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Date: 7/11/2015 7:20:00 PM
Carrie "Mind Blowing" Richards!
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Date: 7/11/2015 6:49:00 PM
Carrie, You have the most unique way of drawing readers into your work to have a feeling as if they were sharing your moment. I loved this entry! Hugs, Connie 7
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