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Mighty Ocean, In your shoal I stand, peering over the swells of your surface. Your gentle waves roll upon the sand, soothing and massaging my feet with your deft fingers...ebbing and flowing in rhythmic beat. Would you be so kind to grant me something I cannot do myself? Trapped upon your shores, I have no way to search for my husband. He sailed away many months ago seeking riches - a pirate's treasure, but if my tears were diamonds, we'd be rich beyond all measure. If in a bottle, I send him a note, would your tide take it on the morrow? I would seal it well to ensure it would float. There's no other way I know of to rid me of sorrow and grief. In my worst fear, he lies entangled in kelp, and if he thinks they're my arms wrapped around him, he'll drown feeling that it was I, holding him in his sleep. But if he still lives, he needs a sign of hope that he will return to me...home with me, where he belongs. My note will help him hear my voice, cried in mournful song. My heart entreats you, great stormy sea carry my bottle on crested waves of blue Or my treasure trove of hurt will surely be the cause of my death; the last thing I do.

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Date: 2/3/2020 12:40:00 PM
Another going to my favorites ... for the reasons of all great poetry, and for reasons that are inexpressible for me. Depth and poignancy beyond word.
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Date: 11/13/2015 6:27:00 PM
This is already almost prose poetry, Lin! The only difference is that this is addressed to something while haibun is much like a contemplation plus a haiku. Let me know if you come out with a haibun, ok? Meanwhile, this is great in itself and is a 7 for me.
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Date: 11/13/2015 6:40:00 PM
Thank you so much, Kim, for such generous praise and the 7.
Date: 11/13/2015 2:05:00 PM
What a great write my friend Lin. This is truly awesome and beautiful..........A.M.
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Date: 11/13/2015 2:16:00 PM
Thank you very much, A.M. It makes me smile to know you like it so well.
Date: 11/13/2015 1:02:00 PM
Dear Lin Lane What a marvelous work here my friend, love ever line and verse simply amazing, love the imagery, a brilliant piece that I give you a seven for and believe you me, I don't give seven out easily my friend, but you deserve it for this wonderful piece of poetry, and thank you also for your review of my works also, cheri
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Date: 11/13/2015 1:54:00 PM
Thank you, Cheryl...all the more grateful because you give your 7s with reserve.

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