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I sign in my messenger, And scan my buddy list. As my cursor scaled the names, My finger couldn’t resist. I clicked the mouse on your name, Like I’d done a thousand times. I stared at the blank page, Where you used to write your rhymes. I’m overgrown with sadness, Happiness ceases to begin. It reads, you’re unavailable and You’ll receive the message upon signing in. That’s where things get tough, I know that will never be. The moment you left my life, It felt like someone robbed me. They stole my bestest friend, Leaving the greatest memories behind. My whole list has yellow faces, As yours appears permanently...offline. __________________________ ‘Bestest’ is misspelled purposely, dedicated to a friend that I greatly miss.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 4/27/2009 10:25:00 PM
Clever work again, I like the way you approached it with your unique way.
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Date: 4/18/2009 12:07:00 PM
Real emotions cleverly and nicely penned.
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Date: 4/17/2009 11:41:00 PM
Sad write, but nicely written. True talent in your descriptions.
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Date: 4/17/2009 4:42:00 PM
How well you describe the sad feeling when a member of the Soup family leaves and takes their poems off the site. There have been a few poets whose sudden disappearance has saddened me as well. Beautiful poem, Raul! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 4/17/2009 1:41:00 PM
Wow! Never has a 404 message felt so shocking in its sadness, Raul! When I consider how many friends that have slipped away over the years, I can relate to this message with full understanding. Warm regards, John.
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Date: 4/17/2009 10:43:00 AM
Can defintiely relate to this, and it is very sad indeed. Good write.
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Date: 4/17/2009 8:29:00 AM
Feeling the vibe Raul...and I empathize...nice work...josh
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Date: 4/17/2009 2:20:00 AM
A sad song Raul.Rgds Brian
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Date: 4/16/2009 2:54:00 PM
this is done really well...very touching write Raul.....nice work!..love n smiles Maryam*
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Date: 4/16/2009 7:27:00 AM
Please sing it...it's BEAUTIFUL. It fits to be a country music with a guitar, no drums. All the best to you.
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Date: 4/16/2009 7:03:00 AM
I have myself, pondered that possibility with others on this wonderful poetry "home site" ....and see how sad it would be to lose a friend...never to know why, where they have disappeared into thin air. you said it so touchingly...I am sorry Raul, that you have lost a friend here...I hope he or she will return.
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Date: 4/16/2009 5:34:00 AM
Aww, so sorry Raul. This is very sad. My heart goes out to you. Love, Shar
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Date: 4/16/2009 4:26:00 AM
A very touching and moving piece...your heart is shown clearly.
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