Night Glow

Deep through the night The embers burn Entwined bodies turn On a bed of thorns and roses. ----------------------------------------- This was my first poem on Soup. Felt like swimming in uncharted waters! ----------------------------------------- Contest: Beginnings Matter Sponsor: Richard Lamoureux Placed: 3rd

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Bill Baker

Date: 6/19/2023 4:12:00 PM

Congratulation on your #rd place award, Paul... nice start my friend. Write On! Bill p.s. Thought I'd come back to your first posting like I generally do when I find a poet I really like. Well worth the scroll back. :-)

Paul Callus
Date: 6/19/2023 11:04:00 PM

That was so nice of you to look up one of my 'oldies', Bill. Time goes by so quickly, and even our styles of writing tend to change and adapt to the passing of years. Have a nice day, my friend. // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/20/2020 1:17:00 PM

Wow!!! What a sizzler! Scorching hot!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/20/2020 5:23:00 PM

Thank you, Eileen. I thought the embers would have died out by now:) Hugs // paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/13/2018 5:19:00 PM

Hiya Paul, love to go back to one's first post,,,awesome poem this, physical beauty and the beast..

Paul Callus
Date: 6/14/2018 1:51:00 AM

I too like to read what member poets' first contribution to Soup was; most of the time I am not disappointed! Thank you for the encouraging compliments:) Regards // paul

Ricky Muse

Date: 1/13/2018 2:23:00 PM

The line "a bed of thorns and roses" is striking. Nice poem.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/13/2018 4:08:00 PM

Thank you for reading & liking, Richard. Regards // paul

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 12/30/2017 2:06:00 AM

Of course I had to stop to read your first poem on the Soup. Honestly, at first read I misread the word "through" (maybe because its 3:04 am) Phew. Wipes brow. Its a beautiful write, Paul and I'm so impressed with your talents that I want to learn from you. Looking forward to many years here on Soup.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/30/2017 3:02:00 AM

Many thanks, Rhoda...you are kind & generous:) You are a fast learner and I have been impressed by your natural ability to write. You also possess great humor, which is an added asset! ~ 3:04 am...is that late or early?:) ~ Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/16/2017 8:14:00 PM

Ah, pain and passion... I so admire what I've read so far from you that I had to come see your first poem on PS. This is an enthralling write Paul with sizzling textured imagery, tactile, visual and emotional.. Captivating, enticing and brilliant in it's short form... which I love! The most fantastic four lines I've read in a long time. So happy you jumped in feet first with your awesome first write! A worthy winner too I see, Congratulations!! Warmest wishes..

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2017 3:21:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely insightful feedback, Susan....very much appreciated. You are not only a very good writer, but an awesome critic, too:) Have a nice weekend. Warm regards // paul

Lynn Marie

Date: 3/12/2017 10:35:00 PM

...where it all began Paul :-) beautiful writing right from the start. your note made me smile... as a grateful reader, I'd say you are naturally gifted.:-) many blessings to you, lynn

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2017 9:40:00 AM

You are a kind and generous critic, Lynn:) Thank you! I can assure you that you too are talented:) Regards // paul

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/17/2016 8:23:00 PM

A beautiful beginning, Paul. A minimalist approach yield big results often in poetry, I've come to find out in this eclectic poetry community. Good job on this poem. Much love and more love to you and yours.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/20/2016 12:20:00 PM

Thank you for another interesting visit, Freddie. You might have noticed by now that I often tend to write briefly...I'm not into long poems, though I would willingly read one as long as it captures my interest. Best regards // paul

Edlynn Nau

Date: 11/12/2015 2:09:00 PM

Hey! We bought the same bed! No beauty rest! Maybe a Serta for support? Ha! I had to run and see your first one! Love how you make those words glissade! NICE

Edlynn Nau
Date: 11/14/2015 6:27:00 PM

Glissade...to glide, what we want the words to do: to dance, waltz, move, move us, to tell us the story. Hmmm!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/14/2015 6:04:00 PM

Hi Edlynn! We should have tried out that bed before we bought it! Ok...I'll be honest...I googled 'Serta' for I did not really know what it was, though I could guess:) I'm sure that it would be a pleasure to use such a mattress! Love the word 'glissade'...but of course, you're a ballerina! ~ Regards // paul

Bonnie Hollywood-Cutts

Date: 7/28/2015 10:50:00 AM

boy this one sure hits home. As from the outside things can seem so perfect, but on a closer look there are thorns within the beauty.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2015 11:06:00 AM

Thank you for the insightful comments, Bonnie! Also thank you for stopping by; pleased to meet you. ~ paul

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 6/9/2015 7:19:00 PM

I hope they turn more on the roses and miss the thorns. Excellent write Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/10/2015 9:22:00 AM

I agree with you Cecilia, but in life it is hard to gain perfection! Thank you for a lovely visit. hugs // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/5/2015 4:35:00 PM

Paul, Thank you. Have yourself a Happy Easter Love LINDA

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2015 5:23:00 PM

Thank you Linda. Over here it is now 12.23am...Easter Sunday is over...and time to turn in! Happy dreams. :) hugs // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/4/2015 9:30:00 PM

I'm wondering what poem you are talking about? I got to refresh my memory. LINDA

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2015 9:48:00 AM

It was a midnight secret, from two years ago! It was quite personal! hugs // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/2/2015 8:29:00 PM

Hope you are having a wonderful week my friend... I will be here all weekend long.. laters Paul... LINDA

Paul Callus
Date: 4/3/2015 7:52:00 AM

Hi Linda:) Lovely to have you stopping by. Just been reading one of your past 'secret' poems; immensely enjoyed. Curbed my instinct to comment further...Hugs // paul

Julia Ward

Date: 3/11/2015 3:58:00 AM

Congratulations on your win, Paul. It is a well-composed piece so I am not surprised. Hugs, Julia

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2015 1:51:00 PM

Thank you Julia; you are very generous! Hugs // paul

Kelly Deschler

Date: 3/11/2015 12:06:00 AM

Pain and pleasure are always closely entwined, especially when it comes to love... I'm glad to get the chance to read your first post. I had missed it before... Congrats on the win, Paul! Very well done!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2015 1:50:00 PM

Thank you Kelly...love your comments...always lovely and encouraging. A while ago I read your latest offering...a love affair with Poe! Very much impressed!! hugs // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/8/2015 1:18:00 PM

I will have a lovely week...LINDA

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/8/2015 12:41:00 PM

Paul, Congratulations, on your fine win. <3 LINDA <3

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2015 1:14:00 PM

Thank you Linda. Hope you had a lovely weekend (babysitting!!) hugs // paul

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 3/6/2015 4:04:00 PM

Dear Paul, what a wonderful piece this is. You are such a gifted poet and I continue to enjoy reading your masterpieces. Congratulations, my friend on a well-deserved win and a well-deserved rating of "7!"Pandita.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/7/2015 5:22:00 PM

You flatter me, Pandita!!! ...but I enjoy and appreciate it...Thank you:) Encouragement is great for healthy living:) Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Skat A

Date: 3/5/2015 10:16:00 PM

Paul, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Beginnings Matter Win ~SKAT~

Paul Callus
Date: 3/6/2015 7:53:00 AM

Thank you Skat...already a year has passed since I posted that poem!! Time waits not:) /x/ paul

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 3/5/2015 8:03:00 AM

Congratulations Paul you quickly learned to swim xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/5/2015 12:21:00 PM

Thank you Mandy:) Once you jump in, it's either swimming or going under!! I chose to swim:) All the best....paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 3/5/2015 2:31:00 AM

COngrats dearie PAul... :)! always the short punches eh! ":D!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/5/2015 5:45:00 AM

Thank you Olive_eloi :) Glad you like:) hugs // paul

Mark Trichet

Date: 3/5/2015 12:43:00 AM

Glows deep Paul. Congrats on your first poem.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/5/2015 5:24:00 AM

Thank you Mark; yours was a very worthy poem too. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 3/4/2015 2:53:00 PM

such intense imagery Paul - I can relate to the feeling your had posting for the first time lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 3/4/2015 4:29:00 PM

I have had such fun reading the winning poems in the contest and finding out how people felt putting their first poem on soup and also in some cases the reason behind the poem being posted:-) Hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/4/2015 4:20:00 PM

Hi Jan! It's lovely finding you here having a peep at my first poem on Soup! I'm glad that you enjoyed it. Yes, posting this poem was like jumping into the sea:) Hugs // paul

Cherl Dunn

Date: 2/9/2015 3:03:00 PM

Dear Paul, Some may say short and sweet is the easy way out, but in this case I find it's not love this piece of yours it says it all with love and luster, love the last line so much the texturing is amazing, who cares about it's length when it is said with perfection such as this, cheri

Paul Callus
Date: 2/9/2015 3:28:00 PM

Your comments are like sweet caresses, Cherl! I love the way you read into my poems. I must admit that I like writing short poems...I find them challenging because what I would have written in length I have to compress in so little. // You write average length poems which are so compelling that I would not mind if they were much longer. / Have a lovely week. // paul