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Mr Bartender

Oh dear friend of mine I need to tell you about me and my wine It always goes down so smooth All of my cares it does soothe Then when I go home To my frig I do roam Inside another bottle of wine does set So needless to say another glass I get Then my eyes starch to blurling Ants my worchs starch to slurching Jist wunch I tellch waach agret friegs zha ares Angs jist menbers thizisg way i donst goes ta bars

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/27/2014 2:29:00 AM

Carol... CONGRATULATIONS:) on having your poem featured on the soups HOME PAGE. Goodnight poet friend <3 =LINDA

Funom Makama

Date: 6/11/2012 4:23:00 AM

ohh so smooth and cool...

John Castro

Date: 11/30/2011 11:26:00 AM

lol nice :P

Sashi Prabhu

Date: 11/2/2011 12:28:00 PM

WOW, Ryming and the picture in minds comes out crystal clear.... would be gr8 a song to hear,,,,,,,........

Margaret Foster

Date: 11/1/2011 11:43:00 PM

Thanks for the smiles, nothing worse than starchy eyes :-) ...Margaret

M.I.A .

Date: 11/1/2011 10:23:00 PM

LoL! the last verse was a genius! good luck on the contest carol. a real winner for me

Prince Ekpemandu

Date: 11/1/2011 2:51:00 PM

nice one Carol.....thumbs you

Rosalyn Lampkin

Date: 11/1/2011 1:47:00 PM

Oh, my dear friend....I can tell you were at the bar when you wrote this one...TOOOOOO many drinks. The last verse is speechless. Thanks for making me LAUGH

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/1/2011 12:56:00 PM

Ha-ha! This is a hoot, Carol. Love it! Especially the last verse. Surely a winner! Love, Carolyn

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 11/1/2011 6:50:00 AM

funny!! love it!!

George Aul

Date: 10/31/2011 4:04:00 PM

I really like your poem........George

Faleshia Murphy

Date: 10/31/2011 2:05:00 PM

hi carol another wonderful write enjoyed this one made me laugh i'll be checking back in on friday still tryinfg to catch up on your delightful poetry love you faleshia

M. Hussain Effendi

Date: 10/30/2011 6:59:00 AM

This is very creative of you, madame. lol... Best of luck for the contest

Robert Walker

Date: 10/30/2011 6:14:00 AM

i really enjoyed this one i can feel your vibe in your writing have a blessed day

Kash Poet

Date: 10/30/2011 5:01:00 AM

Haha..very nice ending here Carol.Enjoyed.Best wishes.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 10/29/2011 11:04:00 PM

Hahaha! LOVE the ending. Amazing and very creative! Always, Laura

Fabiyas M V

Date: 10/29/2011 9:19:00 PM

It is so nicely penned for the contest,Carol

Judy Ball

Date: 10/29/2011 3:12:00 PM

This is too cute and really clever. Loved it. It made me smile. God Bless, JB

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/29/2011 12:41:00 PM

super cute piece and cleverly crafted for the contest..luv the phonetic words of vocab Carol..much success in the contest my friend..luv..

John Bones

Date: 10/29/2011 4:51:00 AM

Dear carol, Good to hear from u again thank u for ur encouraging words from john n lizzie

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/28/2011 10:54:00 PM

VERY imaginative,Carol. Gosh, I wonder if I could pull off an entry in this one. Probably I'm too late! I really like this. I doubt I will ever do a contest again. too many headaches. I really appreciate how you do yours. Luv, Andrea

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/28/2011 4:26:00 PM

Well Carol this indeed is a very very good poem, love this sense of humour. enjoyed. Harry

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/28/2011 4:05:00 PM

Interesting work..Reads like one has gotten two sheets to the wind..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara

Jack Horne

Date: 10/28/2011 3:22:00 PM

LOL, good one : )

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/28/2011 1:41:00 PM

I really like the slurring take at the bottom of the poem...you have done wonderfully with it! What would it look like if she was totally plastered? Awesome work!!