Moonlight - Mirrored Tanka

Moon in sky so bright With her heart embraces the night She dances in light Her graceful face shows thru clouds Bares it all high in the sky Bares it all high in the sky Her graceful face shows thru clouds She dances in light With her heart embraces the night Moon in sky so bright. Dorian Petersen Potter aka ladydp2000 copyright@2011 10.5.2014

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Matthew Anish

Date: 10/7/2014 6:03:00 PM

Nice use of this Asian form! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Joyce Johnson

Date: 10/6/2014 7:25:00 PM

This is a new form to me. Very interesting. Thank you for your kind comments and I am glad that you do not think I brought dishonor to your form. Nice to meet you. Love, Joyce

Dorian Petersen Potter
Date: 10/6/2014 8:20:00 PM

Are you kidding me Joyce, in no way or any form you can do that. I am truly honor that you used it and in such a very nice and witty way. I just love your Halloween poem written in my S.R. form. Thank you for your kind visit and comments and all. A pleasure for me to meet you too Joyce;) - love hugs and blessings! xxx D.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/6/2014 5:04:00 PM

You've created a magical image of the moon's "graceful face" shining through the clouds. Very imaginative! Best wishes, Carolyn

Dorian Petersen Potter
Date: 10/6/2014 8:07:00 PM

Thank you so much for al Carol. So nice of you.i truly appreciate your wonderful comment. Hugs and the best wishes to you too! ;)xxxx D.

Joseph May

Date: 10/6/2014 3:33:00 PM

Very nicely penned Dorian...best wishes

Dorian Petersen Potter
Date: 10/6/2014 8:03:00 PM

Thank you Joe! And the same to you. The best to you! xxxx D.

Jerry Bolton

Date: 10/6/2014 9:16:00 AM

Well done Tanka, Dorian. I'm with Brenda about never seen a mirrored Tanks before. I think it brings out the poem better than the flush left.. I with Brenda about never having seen a mirrored Tanks before. I think it brings out the poem better than the flush left.

Dorian Petersen Potter
Date: 10/6/2014 1:45:00 PM

Thank you Jerry I appreciate your nice comments! Cheers! xxxx D.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/5/2014 11:32:00 PM

Very nice Dorian. I never seen a mirrored Tanka before. It is lovely.

Dorian Petersen Potter
Date: 10/6/2014 1:44:00 PM

Thank you for gracing my page again with your presence and kind comment, Brenda! Love and light! xxx D.