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Missing: Pieces of Me

SPLINTERED HEART like a leg severed, ripped loose: the phantom limb throbs and aches knowing yet unwilling, unable to accept that it's only a ghost playing evil pranks sitting frozen and paralytic from the weight, the frightful weight dragging, forcing down the head welding chin to collarbone... heavy, crushing feeling on the chest punishing pressure on the heart a heart at the point of imploding... alarm clock crying, screaming: time warp between sleep and awake when not yet aware of where one is not yet aware of what or who one is a split-second reprieve until---- (oh, it really did happen oh, I don’t have a leg now oh, you have been torn loose taking pieces of me with you) it has been proven medically: people with life threatening seizures can eventually function normally with half of their brains removed not so with a splintered heart not so with half a heart... Submitted for: Catie’s Free Verse Extravaganza contest Theme: Half a Heart

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Date: 5/16/2016 10:24:00 AM
Salute to your pen and a well done to the mind out of which this sea of wisdom emanated. A definite 7
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Date: 2/28/2016 7:05:00 PM
Another great write. Kudos!
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Date: 2/18/2016 9:03:00 AM
This is wonderful and lovely. Nice poetry here dear friend.
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Date: 1/29/2016 8:37:00 PM
wow, GREAT writing, and to think I never even know you had this gem posted. I see you won with Catie. No small accomplishment, my friend. BIG congrats to you, belatedly.
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Date: 1/22/2016 11:41:00 PM
TIM, congratulations on your win!!! XOX ~LINDA~
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Date: 1/15/2016 2:26:00 AM
Oh my! Congratulations first on win in contest! Second, this is very well-written, so sad and descriptive, an excellent poem but so so sad. A 7
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Date: 1/13/2016 7:55:00 AM
Hi Tim. Congrats for your placement in the contest, with this wonderful verse! ;-)
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Date: 1/12/2016 11:25:00 PM
Tim,, awesome win... :) SKAT
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Date: 1/12/2016 8:00:00 AM
Congratulations on winning in the Free Verse Extravaganza contest Tim! -Hans :)
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Date: 1/12/2016 3:13:00 AM
Congrats on ur awesome win Tim..
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Date: 1/11/2016 2:24:00 PM
I knew this would be on the winner's list, Tim. Very touching!!! Many congrats. Elaine
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Date: 1/9/2016 6:32:00 PM
Oh my dear this is so deep and painful , touchy but very powerful though , great write my friend, , best of luck in the contest ,hugs / / :) dalia
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Date: 1/9/2016 8:24:00 AM
A very impactful write! I think this will do well.
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Date: 1/8/2016 9:54:00 AM
tim, i am awed by the emotional and physical angst of this piece... the heart heals in time... much enjoyed!..huggs
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Date: 1/8/2016 7:31:00 AM
- Heartbreaking, Tim - A child who died will always be missed, you carry it with you in your heart - Luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/8/2016 6:28:00 AM
Oh, this is so pain-filled, Tim. The debilitating effects of physical trauma cannot equal that of psychological and emotional pain of a broken heart. Great write! 7 for me. All the best in the contest. hugs!
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Date: 1/8/2016 5:02:00 AM
We take a risk when we give away a piece of our heart. It's a terrible pain when it's not returned, or worse, when it's crushed. Well done, Tim.
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Date: 1/8/2016 4:05:00 AM
Tim, I feel the heaviness of each line, the possible incoming attacks...powerful and mind bugging with the imagery and message......................... excellent! marked 7 for me..~OLive Eloisa smiles! =`)
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