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A dim lamp flickers by the side of her cold bed. She shivers slightly draped in sheets of red satin, anticipating the light touch of hands on skin, warm breath on bare nape, lips that brush her slender neck. She shivers slightly as the clock starts striking twelve. Her heart beats faster. Footsteps; the wooden door creaks. She shivers slightly. Holding her breath...she feigns sleep. ---------------------------- Contest: Midnight Poetry Sponsor: Nathan D. Placed 6th

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/6/2016 8:50:00 AM

Hi Paul, you just made my day even brighter... You are a special friend. I adore you always. :) I have a new Monoku up about food being evil... LOL.. would you like to have a bite with me... Love LINDA

Paul Callus
Date: 2/6/2016 9:46:00 AM

Thank you Linda...your friendship is appreciated:) I visited your tempting buffet, and though it looks lovely, I suggest we go eat elsewhere:) On the other hand, the one-liners are delicious! hugs // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/6/2016 1:24:00 AM

Hi Paul, Congrats on your win. LINDA

Paul Callus
Date: 2/6/2016 4:25:00 AM

Good morning, Linda:) Thank you for a special visit this Saturday! Keep well! hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 1/31/2016 10:46:00 AM

I return to offer my congrats Paul its great to read this again:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 1/31/2016 11:20:00 AM

Thank you, Jan:) I had forgotten about this contest! ~ Hope you're all keeping well:) hugs // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/31/2016 9:56:00 AM

Awesome work !! No wonder it is in the winners’ list. Congrats..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 1/31/2016 11:07:00 AM

Glad that you enjoyed it, Sara. Thank you, and have a lovely day! ~ Regards // paul

Hansteven Selfa

Date: 1/31/2016 8:56:00 AM

Congratulations Paul on your marvelous win!

Paul Callus
Date: 1/31/2016 10:50:00 AM

Thank you, Hansteven! Have a nice day! // paul

Viv Wigley

Date: 1/31/2016 3:31:00 AM

....and did do well, more well than a well thing, welling. Well done, paul. Regards, Viv

Paul Callus
Date: 1/31/2016 11:19:00 AM

Thank you Viv:) I'm still mulling over your comments:)) Regards // paul

Susan Gentry

Date: 1/30/2016 1:31:00 PM

Beautifully written poem with surprise ending. Excellent! Congratulations on your win. A 7 IMHO

Paul Callus
Date: 1/30/2016 2:18:00 PM

Thank you Susan, both for the high rating, congrats and lovely feedback. I appreciate your humble/honest opinion:) ~ Regards // paul

Constance La France

Date: 1/30/2016 11:42:00 AM

Paul, congratulations on your placement with this beautiful write!

Paul Callus
Date: 1/30/2016 2:46:00 PM

Thank you, Constance. Hope you're having a lovely weekend:) ~ paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 1/30/2016 3:06:00 AM

Congrats on ur awesome winning work Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 1/30/2016 10:05:00 AM

Many thanks Upma:) ~ All the best. // paul

Skat A

Date: 1/30/2016 2:45:00 AM

Love it Paul. Congrats on the win. SKAT

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 1/29/2016 9:28:00 PM

Outstanding piece with awesome imagery! Congratulations dear Paul on your wonderful win! A-7 of course! Pandita

Paul Callus
Date: 1/30/2016 3:07:00 PM

You are kind and generous dear Pandita:) ... a most welcome visit...Thank you!! ~ Hope you enjoy your weekend. ~ Warm regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/29/2016 8:53:00 PM

I LOVE this one. I guess it 's the romantic in me. My favorite one!! Congrats in the contest. I had forgotten about this one!!

Paul Callus
Date: 1/30/2016 9:59:00 AM

Thank you Andrea. The romantic side often tempts our imagination...I sensed it also in your winning triolet! // paul

Nathan D.

Date: 1/29/2016 7:38:00 PM

thank you Paul. Nate

Paul Callus
Date: 1/30/2016 5:23:00 AM

Thank you Nathan! Quite a pleasant surprise this morning! Glad you liked my midnight offering. ~ All the best. // paul

Lu Loo

Date: 11/22/2015 2:36:00 PM

WOW! Wonderful Paul! You will do great in the contest, you are so talented :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/22/2015 2:44:00 PM

Thank you, Laura; you are too kind:) Pleased to see you showing such faith in this entry:) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/18/2015 8:00:00 PM

VEry nice take on that challenge. Love your way of thinking on this one!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2015 12:53:00 PM

Thank you for liking, Andrea:) ~ Regards // paul

Rizwana Bhurani

Date: 11/18/2015 7:45:00 PM

Thriller with a with a twist...curiosity graduates till the end...interesting....

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2015 12:50:00 PM

I like your comments, Rizwana...thank you! Regards // paul

Kp Nunez

Date: 11/18/2015 3:05:00 PM

:-) I prefer to see it as playful ending. The deeply evocative lines preceding justify this view. Blessings, Paul. hugs!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2015 11:25:00 AM

I agree with you, Kim:) But there is always space for a double twist! Thank you & Hugs ~ Regards // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/18/2015 1:56:00 PM

So very clever, Paul! I did not expect your twist at the end. I am sure it will do very well for the contest! Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2015 11:23:00 AM

Thank you for the nice comments, Sandra...and for the faith you show in it:) Regards // paul

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 11/16/2015 11:21:00 AM

Another home alone and the night thriller,can humanity proffer any solution especially for the aged Paul? The fear of the night, I mean the real night is of great concern and there is a great lesson in your Poem here. Kudos and hugs.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2015 11:56:00 AM

You are right, Kayode; night offers endless creativity, especially to the imaginative writer! This poem has the capability of having a lovely passionate ending, or else one could turn it into one of sexual abuse and horror. ~ All the best, my friend. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 11/16/2015 7:31:00 AM

Paul, creativity escalates as I proceed to your lines.. =`)~Olive Eloisa =`)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2015 11:47:00 AM

Thank you for finding creativity in these lines, Olive_eloi:) txs also for finding time to pay me a welcome visit:) Hugs // paul

Michael Tor

Date: 11/15/2015 4:28:00 PM

Paul tantalizing write. Enjoyed reading. Cleverly done with a twist. Excellent entry for the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2015 11:45:00 AM

Glad that you enjoyed it, Michael. Luckily, the title of this contest brought swift inspiration:) Thank you for your lovely comments. ~ All the best. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/14/2015 10:17:00 PM

I love the turn you took at the ending of this poem Paul. I felt as if I were right there with her. Beautiful!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2015 11:34:00 AM

Your comments show that you liked this poem, Connie:) Thank you; it means a lot to me! I do rely on your sincere feedback. ~ Regards // paul

Edlynn Nau

Date: 11/13/2015 1:31:00 PM

Wow! This really has a twist to it. You lead us with one feeling and then the twist at the end. Midnight becomes both hopeful & dark. Interesting verse and enjoyed how you set up the movement here. May your skill see you through with a win for the contest!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2015 11:22:00 AM

Thank you for your tasteful feedback, Edlynn! I like it when readers read 'into' a poem. Glad you enjoyed! ~ Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/13/2015 1:03:00 PM

- So beautiful, Paul - Luck in contest - I wish you a lovely and peaceful weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/15/2015 5:29:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Anne Lise! Your weekend visit is much appreciated. Hope you too had a lovely weekend. Hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/13/2015 8:34:00 AM

Sexy, sultry an oh so tastefuly hot!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/15/2015 5:27:00 PM

Thank you, Richard; coming from you, these comments mean a lot. Regards // paul