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I fell in love at thirteen You might say I was quite green I held his hand tight He was out of sight But now he’s being so mean! At camp, spent days in a tent His pride had taken a dent We made up just fine That sweet boy of mine But now he seems so hell bent. He needs some joy in his life And though he has a great wife A friend’s always nice To add some more spice But he’s afraid of the strife. I’d shower him with such joy But he's a silly old boy He won’t come to play He must have his way My heart he’s used like a toy! “My dear, why can’t you be nice? Before you end it- think twice Between you and me Let’s make harmony You’ve made me pay a high price!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 9/17/2014 7:44:00 AM
I must be reading this wrong, if you are 13 and he is married, it sounds like he is a pedophile.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/18/2014 11:04:00 AM
He was 15...I was 13..... He's married now. Hugs
Date: 12/12/2012 1:52:00 PM
Wonderful! Who was the idiot to let you go? Hugs Demetrios
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/12/2012 9:50:00 PM
HA HA HA HA HA! Lovely post, Demetrios! :) Oh well....that's life!
Date: 11/24/2012 7:09:00 AM
Great way to use the form Limerick..Sometimes in marriage we learn how to put the dagger in deep and twist it..We learn the other's weaknesses and use them..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 11/24/2012 9:50:00 AM
I know. It is sad, but true. :( While there is life...there is hope. Thanks for your post, Sara. God bless!
Date: 11/21/2012 12:32:00 PM
wonderful write Eileen,still hear the love lol
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 11/21/2012 12:42:00 PM
Oh well.......like I wrote in my poem, Immortal....the heart's dead are never buried! Thanks for the post, dear Richard. Hope all is well with you! :)
Date: 11/21/2012 2:14:00 AM
I enjoyed your limerick. Such a gentle soul you are. For an "X" I would have expected a harsher more biting limerick. I'm glad to see the experience hasn't left you Jaded.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 11/21/2012 2:41:00 AM
Oh Jon, it has. I sent him this limerick.., no reply. It has left me very jaded, and I'm still trying to come to grips with it. Found him after so many years. We both have moved on and have families but there is always something special about a childhood sweetheart isn't there? Doing the right thing isn't always easy. Oh well...thanks so much for the lovely post. :)
Date: 11/20/2012 9:18:00 AM
Pretty darn cool! I never read an extended limerick before, but I like the form. The meter for limericks is pretty strict and I think you could make just a few minor changes in some of the stanzas to get this poem's meter perfect.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 11/20/2012 1:47:00 PM
Roy...you're right! I don't know how I didn't pick up on them. I fixed some of the lines...hope it is more smooth flowing now. Thanks for the tip. :)
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 11/20/2012 1:21:00 PM
Hi Roy! Thanks for your post. I tried to stick to the meter, but please feel free to suggest changes! I'd welcome getting an email from you! :) Thanks for taking the time to read and post.
Date: 11/20/2012 6:43:00 AM
naughty boy indeed, love Elizabeth
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 11/20/2012 7:05:00 AM
:) Thanks for the post, Elizabeth!

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