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Melted Down

It took eight and a half years You finally melted me down Dribbled me on the floor The liquification of me Not needed any more When I had started I was so strong I worked hours on end Was part of the team Took part in your dream Some how I got lost along the way To much heat every day Not noticing the signs Lost inside the lines Unable to comprehend No longer able to pretend Now I am a different shape Cooled within the mold Put on a press and rolled Up for auction and sold Left to the highest bidder Sold and more than bitter So the dance begins again Yet I am not the same More familiar with the game I will protect myself Refuse to be put on a shelf I will not be pushed aside Melted or undefined I am much stronger redefined My new armor is asbestos lined Meltdown Contest

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/11/2013 10:32:00 PM

Richard.. Congratulations, in the MELTDOWN contest... take care-- always~ Linda

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/12/2013 6:48:00 AM

Thanks Linda

Karen Anglesey

Date: 7/11/2013 6:57:00 PM

Melt down perfectly described in the first stanza. Hopeful that the asbestos lined armor will assure that you won't get lost inside the lines again. Great expression and congrats on the meltdown win :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/11/2013 7:08:00 PM

Thanks Karen.

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 7/9/2013 10:11:00 AM

Richard such strength and courage conveyed in this poem. Congrats on your fabulous win. Warm Smiles, Connie

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/9/2013 6:15:00 PM

Thanks for your visits Connie

Colleen Bono

Date: 7/8/2013 9:31:00 PM

You beat me by 1 place. But you deserve it.2 more days.Love Colleen

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/9/2013 7:16:00 AM

One more Day! I hope you have a truly wonderful trip.

Jack Jordan

Date: 7/8/2013 7:09:00 PM

You nailed this one! Too many of us have been there with you. Fine writing, Richard, and congratulations... Jack

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/9/2013 8:31:00 AM

Thanks Jack

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/8/2013 5:40:00 PM

This indeed, was a melt down of a difficult kind.........I hope you are stronger and wiser wearing your new suit of armor. :) Congratulations, Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/9/2013 8:32:00 AM

Thanks Carrie.

Caleah Buil

Date: 6/27/2013 9:37:00 AM

Amazing...somehow you find just the perfect words. I wish you the best in this contest! I know you'll definitely be placed for it! It's always so sad to be forgotten and put away... but we learn from mistakes. This reminds me of the song Titanium by David Guetta... Wonderful write!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/27/2013 6:16:00 PM

I love that song. Thanks for all your visits today.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/12/2013 6:11:00 AM

You got wiser, mon ami, Richard, thus your value has increased so much that no-one will be able to buy you out! Wonderful verse, marvelous message! Thank you and good luck!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2013 6:29:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios. I appreciate your visit.

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 6/11/2013 9:11:00 PM

Great write. I'm really impressed with this pen and I hope it will be ranked high in the contest. Well done and Good luck. AO

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/27/2013 6:17:00 PM

Thanks sorry I missed this kind comment till now.

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 6/11/2013 7:13:00 PM

I think I will adapt this mindset ,so powerful! Great entry for the contest Rick. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 7:38:00 PM

Thanks Cecilia, hugs back

Yanny Widjanarko

Date: 6/11/2013 6:03:00 PM

Still "WOW"-ing the asbestos lined, I really amazed about how this poem ends, really spectacular line Rick! :D good luck for the contest, and wishing you a wonderful day there :D hug, Yanny

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 6:09:00 PM

Hi Yanny, so nice to have a visit from you today, hugs Rick

Ilene Bauer

Date: 6/11/2013 3:43:00 PM

very powerful and poetic! i like this very much!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 3:53:00 PM

Thanks ilene. Hugs Rick

Manel Gunatillake

Date: 6/11/2013 11:41:00 AM

Oh! hello welcome home! This is fantastic "I am much stronger redefined My new armor is asbestos lined" why not steel? Ha! ha! Thank you for your comments on my last poem. did n't get any mood to write any new. hope to do one soon. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 3:54:00 PM

Hugs back

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 2:26:00 PM

Hi Manel, let me know when you have inspiration, I will be happy to read your words.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/11/2013 11:36:00 AM

bold and forceful write write.. i like the way your clinched this with a tranformational end line, richard... well done!.:) huggs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 3:54:00 PM

Hugs back

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 2:26:00 PM

Thanks Nette

Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/11/2013 10:50:00 AM

Powerful entry! A very easy going flow and I was struck by the coldness of the last line... I believe this will do well!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 2:26:00 PM

Thanks Tim.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/11/2013 10:21:00 AM

Richard...how do you do it? How does inspiration come for contests? I don't know...for me it is the other way around. Inspiration comes from life, then I think of contests! Incredible. Hey...about the senryu with the quote from you...If you want to check it out, go to Anne Lise Poem about dreaming...the one that won a contest. I read that one and read your comment, and you mentioned also Shakespear and to sleep perchance to dream...then...the comment that inspired me! :) Yes...you do inspire me!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 2:29:00 PM

Sometimes all I need is a single word and ideas pop into my head. To be honest I find it very surprising. I will check out the comment Eileen. Hugs Rick

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/11/2013 10:02:00 AM

That asbestos is very dangerous so one can be injured from heartache and disappointment or be physically injured from the dangerous sustance asbestos..Enjoyed reading your unique work..Thanks for the visit to my work..Your comments are always encouraging..Sara

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 2:30:00 PM

I never thought of the danger part when I chose that word, good point. Thanks Sara