Long Way To Go

Introduction: Eyes can be deceiving...So don't give up with a snap because Its only the beginning. Fight it, ease in your future and make it glow from the gray vicinity. We exist in an age of shadow, Shadows that we blindly follow The moments when we feel so cold, That is where we need to mold There are many roads to take, And judgments to make No one’s going to make our choice, It’s something we hold within our voice At times the path seems to be a dead-end, That’s the part where everything really extend We still got a long way to go, So, don’t stroll out and believe it’s the end

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/30/2011 12:00:00 AM

Aqeb, CONGRATULATIONS !! On your poem being featured this week. Stopping by to read every poem on the home page. have yourself a wonderful week,..Linda

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/29/2011 10:47:00 AM

Congratulations on your fine poetry being featured this week aqeb. Love, Carol

Gary Fields

Date: 8/7/2011 10:14:00 PM

Remember to alway's keep the flow. Keep your rhyme's tight and your subject matter interesting! And stick to what you know. Practice and confidence make's exceptional. GOOD WRITS; Keep it with-in the pen/your friend in the pen/G.FIELDS * Personal observation..... Don't do what I did for God sake, alway's use a word-check!

Judy Ball

Date: 8/2/2011 1:22:00 AM

Really well thought out and well expressed. Always remember to balance the wording so you don't lose the beat in a rhyme. Balance is also important in prose. You have a real aptitude for this. I believe a poem should say something and not just be a bunch of words strung well together. You do this well. This has a great message. Love it. God Bless, JB

Aqeb Be-Nazir Ibn Minar
Date: 8/2/2011 9:30:00 PM