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Lifting the Fog

Listening, waiting, watching Intently, wondering Focused, not daring to move The little robin waits Immobile, watching the gardener Nothing stops his merry chirp Going to enjoy breakfast The fog of early morning Heated by the watery sun thins, eating is a priority for robins short life Fog of wondering is lifted Only turned soil will supply worms Gardener gets up early to provide Penned 4/07/2014

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/23/2014 4:41:00 PM

Seren :) Thank you for the sweet reply, on my comment. I'm a little late, getting back to all the replies, left a while back. XOX ~LINDA~

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/18/2014 10:32:00 PM

well done, I have a problem with puncuation too, I dig the poem though, good job :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/18/2014 2:29:00 PM

Amazing, Seren....PD

Seren Roberts
Date: 7/18/2014 9:02:00 PM

Ty. Linda

Faye Gibson

Date: 7/18/2014 9:57:00 AM

Seren, wonderful take on the phrase you chose. I love the metaphor for life here, too. Congratulations.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/18/2014 9:10:00 AM

This is so sweet, congratulations on your win.

Arlene Smith

Date: 7/18/2014 7:15:00 AM

Beautiful, Seren! Congrats on a great win! Hugs.. Arlene

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/18/2014 1:19:00 AM

Very lovely write Seren! Congrats on win!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/17/2014 11:55:00 PM

Seren, this was an adorable poem. I placed lower the poems with little or no punctuation. I want to do my next contest something to do with punctuation because I am noticing many poets who are not using it, and maybe it's just me, but it is something I want to see more of! Congrats in my contest. You did the theme in a creative way.

Seren Roberts
Date: 7/18/2014 12:45:00 AM

lol point taken, looking at my poem I started using punctuation, what happened I don't know. Andrea thanks for placing me ...Seren

Emer Capate

Date: 7/4/2014 7:53:00 AM

though "ROBIN" is not familiar here in the Philippines, your well defined scenario paints a picture in my mind... emer..keep writing Seren

Seren Roberts
Date: 7/4/2014 8:22:00 PM

Lovely pretty bird, puts a smile on most peoples faces. But can be a little fighter if another robin appears that isnt his mate...Seren

Tim Smith

Date: 7/4/2014 5:55:00 AM

A beautiful acrostic Seren...The robin an image of spring and new things to come...waiting for the soil to be turned for nourishment..There is some nice meaning here...have a wonderful weekend.. hugs Tim

Seren Roberts
Date: 7/4/2014 8:23:00 PM

Hi Tim Yes the robin, reminds us of so much. His chirpy song is always welcomed.....Seren

Jadazzle United

Date: 7/4/2014 3:25:00 AM

wonderful acrositc - I always smile when I see a robin in the garden its such a cheery bird - love the way they follow you round when you are gardening. Good luck in the contest. Hugs jan xx

Seren Roberts
Date: 7/4/2014 8:20:00 PM

yes but they can be really feisty when another crosses his path......Seren