Let Me See

The orange glow of the setting sun has faded beyond the skyline Flickers of the candle flame are low at this table for two as we dine Oh starshine way up in the sky glisten on my beauty make this darkness disappear I need to see the sparkle shining deeply in her eyes I long to see the passion hiding in her heart illuminate the love seeping out of her soul Oh starshine up above Reveal to me, her beauty exhibit her everlasting love Show me her strength and courage Let me see...Let me see

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David Meade

Date: 2/19/2015 6:00:00 PM

Your creativity continue to shine through your words of love. Outstanding job dear friend.

Tim Smith
Date: 2/19/2015 6:02:00 PM

Thank you David for your lovely comment

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/19/2015 11:39:00 AM

lovely write...began with a wish and ended with excited anticipation.. romance is in the air, tim.. ohhh so fine!.. huggs

Tim Smith
Date: 2/19/2015 3:18:00 PM

Thanks nette....we all need romance....... Huggs

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/19/2015 10:32:00 AM

What a dazzling image of beauty, dear Tim! Wonderful writing!

Tim Smith
Date: 2/19/2015 3:17:00 PM

Thank you my dear friend...My heart is singing

Emile Pinet

Date: 2/19/2015 10:14:00 AM

Your words are spoken out of love and have a gentle pleasing pitch to help the reader release control over to the words and feel them within our hearts. Emile. #7

Tim Smith
Date: 2/19/2015 3:14:00 PM

Thank you Emile...yes love is flowing out of my heart

Laura Leiser

Date: 2/18/2015 11:34:00 PM

A beautiful, romantic write, Tim. Very nicely done.

Tim Smith
Date: 2/19/2015 3:13:00 PM

Thank you Laura....hugs Tim

Nathan D.

Date: 2/18/2015 10:07:00 PM

that is a very cool write mr. tim. this to me as a feeling that she somehow wronged you and you are trying to give her a second chance longing for things to be the way they were but that could just be me I have been wrong once before I think :P

Tim Smith
Date: 2/19/2015 3:02:00 PM

Things can't get much better. Just needing to know what makes her tic

Jan Allison

Date: 2/18/2015 6:52:00 PM

beautiful flow to this romantic write Tim:-) Hugs jan xx

Tim Smith
Date: 2/19/2015 3:12:00 PM

Thank you do much Jan....hugs Tim

Vera Duggan

Date: 2/18/2015 5:34:00 PM

Tim this is one lovely flowing poem, they just get better and better, keep them coming and take care............Vera........

Tim Smith
Date: 2/19/2015 3:00:00 PM

Thanks Very.....hugs Tim

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/18/2015 3:14:00 PM

I hope the starshine reveals all about your love and may it makes you happy to know what lies in her heart.A very romantic poem with a beautiful imagery of a cand lelit dinner for two,Awesome.

Tim Smith
Date: 2/18/2015 3:22:00 PM

Thank you Charmaine....I think the starshine will reveal all...hugs Tim

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 2/18/2015 3:09:00 PM

Very nice pen Tim! This is very romantic and sweet Tim, my dear friend. I enjoyed it! A 7 from me! Have a lovely day! In his light! God bless you! :) xxx D.

Tim Smith
Date: 2/18/2015 3:20:00 PM

Thank you Dorian my good friend...hugs Tim

Ken Carroll

Date: 2/18/2015 1:54:00 PM

Splendid romantic write Tim rich with imagery.. Good Job!

Tim Smith
Date: 2/18/2015 3:18:00 PM

Thanks Ken....hugs Tim

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/18/2015 1:14:00 PM

- I think you have all these elements around you, Tim - Beautiful! (Comments and replay ..... disappeared again !!!!!: ((((((((((((((((( - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Tim Smith
Date: 2/18/2015 1:33:00 PM

Thanks A-L...yes I know....a bummer .....hugs Tim