Learning From a Mistake

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There seemed no redemption from a crucial mistake while escaping dear home… I watched stars up high enkindling raw freedom to search the eagle's trail. Yet this reckless dream bore uncertainty; as sundown paled low contemplation roused; hands pounding on our gate.. Mom …she held me this rebel tamed, as prayers lit for favors sent. With kindness, I embrace adulthood; This flame of life Blessed! ................ After graduating from college at 21, I left home without notice for three days to challenge my need for freedom.. ................................... Laura Loo's Your Biggest Mistake 7/7/2016

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Lu Loo

Date: 7/8/2016 8:54:00 AM

Nette! Wow! What an amazing form you used! I learned something new! This was remarkably beautiful lady, your words are a true gift and I am grateful to have the chance to read your poems...congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/7/2016 1:45:00 PM

- A part of life, leaving the safe nest - (I got married when I was 21 :))) - Great written, Nette - I wish you good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Karam Misra

Date: 7/7/2016 8:46:00 AM

The return of the prodigal daughter! Nicely writ, Nette.There is a certain time in our youth when we would like to break free and "find ourselves". Sometimes it becomesa very regrettable decision. It's good you learnt some life's lessons from from the experience. All the best for the contest, Nette. ~karam~

Leon Datu

Date: 7/7/2016 6:50:00 AM

Impressive poem that I can relate to. I have walked away a few times as a late teener to feed this sense of non-conformity realizing how my parents worried a lot for my safety. Deserving a 7!

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/7/2016 6:45:00 AM

Never good to go off without telling someone but if that is the biggest mistake you've ever made My goodness, you're an angel. Enjoyed the well structured write, nette.

Frederick Espiritu

Date: 7/7/2016 4:09:00 AM

i like the entranced of the child... indeed they are blessing during time like this... nice poem...