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Last Stand

Who was it that has sent you here this day? Timed with chance by a wronged man's suspicions. An accurate surprise shot you this way. It was quick like me shutting this small book. Death before repentance on back slide slope. Smoother than oil drops on honeycomb's hook. Left with regrets measured by hourglass sand. So it is by this white throne I now stand. ------------------------------------------------------- **Inspired by Proverbs 5:3 (KJV)** I have been here for almost three years. I still like my first posted poem, though I no longer like poems I wrote years prior to joining PS (this first poem is the only exception). I still like this poem because it was the start of my style changing. Since becoming a member, I have learned a lot about the different forms of poetry, especially meter.

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Date: 9/4/2017 7:59:00 PM
Rob, Your first write here at PS is awesome! I enjoyed reading your poem, then Proverbs, then your poem again and lingered in the a-ha moment! A great write! :)
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Date: 12/29/2015 3:16:00 PM
I'm off to my KJV to investigate the source of your inspiration here... 'death before repentance on back slide slope' is a particularly powerful phrase. Well done, Keith
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Date: 10/13/2015 1:33:00 PM
Very interesting! It is always a pleasure to read a poets first write. :)
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Date: 5/4/2015 2:39:00 AM
A very well written poem Rob. A seven from me :)
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Date: 3/8/2015 12:47:00 PM
Rob, Congratulations, on your fine win. <3 LINDA <3
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Date: 3/5/2015 11:43:00 PM
Rob, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Beginnings Matter Win ~SKAT~
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Date: 3/4/2015 7:00:00 PM
When you read the bible verse and then your poem the feeling is powerful and deep Rob. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 3/4/2015 2:26:00 PM
dropping back again with my congrats:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/20/2014 10:12:00 PM
a very interesting one with some great images. congrats.
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Date: 11/19/2014 12:29:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Rob.
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Date: 11/17/2014 1:47:00 AM
very deep and powerful - many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/16/2014 7:50:00 PM
Proverbs 5:3(NIV) For the lips of the adulterous woman drip honey, and her speech is smoother than oil; ///////////// Ahhh...Great write / A great lesson to bring one closer to Our Great Cornerstone. guilty Pleasure and growth through..........LOOK OUT.........CONGRATS
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Rob Carmack
Date: 11/17/2014 12:18:00 AM
TY Rick. Also the KJV: "For the lips of a strange woman drop as an honeycomb, and her mouth is smoother than oil"
Date: 9/16/2014 5:49:00 PM
Rob, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy the community. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I'm looking forward to following you and your poetry:) Here's the link to the contest page. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/ <---~Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Rob Carmack
Date: 9/17/2014 1:18:00 PM
Thanks. I have entered another of my poems in your contest.
Date: 9/14/2014 7:20:00 PM
Hi Rob, what a deep powerful write this is! Bravo! A warm welcome to PoetrySoup and happy writings! Pandita
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Rob Carmack
Date: 9/17/2014 1:19:00 PM
Nice to meet you and TY for reading.
Date: 9/14/2014 8:17:00 AM
Warm welcome to PoetrySoup,Rob - I choose your first very well written poem - You write skillfully - Nice to meet you! - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- Be kind and keep PoetrySoup as a haven -(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you for posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Rob Carmack
Date: 9/14/2014 11:28:00 PM
Thank you Anne-Lisa. The family here is extensive and seems supportive. I look forward to my experience here.
Date: 9/13/2014 3:51:00 PM
I truly enjoyed this piece. It has an easy meter which makes for a great flow and the rhymes are true. I like the dark element as well. Nicely done.
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Rob Carmack
Date: 9/14/2014 11:28:00 PM
TY

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