Last Call

I heard the "Click", in my ear But you never said, "Good Bye". You don't know how it made me feel How it made me want to cry... I thought you were different From others I had known. I was really hung up on you Until you hung up the phone. We had something special It seemed that way to me. Then you said you felt "Tied Down" That you needed to be "Set Free... I thought you were different From others I had known. I was really hung up on you Until you hung up the phone. I know that you'll be sorry I know you'll want me near. I know you're gonna call me up But a "Click" is all you'll hear... I thought you were different From others I had known. I was really hung up on you but, I'M HANGING UP THE PHONE!

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/19/2015 12:24:00 PM

Great play on words. I see we both chose "Last Call".

Dan Cwiak
Date: 10/19/2015 12:35:00 PM

Thanks, Richard. Good luck in the contest.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/17/2015 8:08:00 PM

Dan, your repeating lines offer impact and flow beautifully from one stanza to the next. This is a great entry, if for the contest. Hope to see it as a top winner!

Dan Cwiak
Date: 10/18/2015 7:03:00 PM

As I mentioned to John, I actually wrote this as a C & W song, but never really did anything with it. I don't think it's too late, but where do I send it? As always, thanks for your visit and encouragement.

Robert Lindley

Date: 10/16/2015 6:22:00 PM

I think its far better to hear the click than it is to hear all the screaming and terrible cursing I've heard far too many times as a wild young mustang. And trust me, I deserved a lot of it. Later it came many times when I didn't. Great poem, solid 7...

Dan Cwiak
Date: 10/16/2015 6:43:00 PM

LOL You are not the only one, Robert. We were not attempting to date the same gal, were we? Thanks for the reading and your comments.

John Fleming

Date: 10/15/2015 1:53:00 PM

This is an entertaining little poem, Dan. I guess most of us have heard that little click at sometime or other in our lives. It certainly struck a chord with me! Nicely expressed. Cheers! :) john P.s A Seven.

Dan Cwiak
Date: 10/16/2015 6:40:00 PM

Interesting that you mention the word chord, John. This is a poem I wrote as the words to a C &W song. I even have the melody. Unfortunately, I don't read or write music so I never really did anything with it in that regard. Thanks for the read and your comments.