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Keeping It Real

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restless thoughts find her half-awake covering pain with another slapstick laugh and insecurities with giant egoistic words, the hurt is shattering , but no one will know just another pinch that some music can heal hiding droopy, dark circles around night eyes giggle and joke, but how delirious she has gone smiling along while wrinkling soul inside screams-- the cold wind nips playfully, keeping her company there’s a light in her mind, but promises not to cry instead, pretending that laughter soothes the wound It’s just the season of falling in and out of love, but It’s been so long ; so long now, that nights hang between what’s real and imagined a thin, fine line that takes control of the dark-- one last light on for the restless and shattered just keep the signs of moon and stars on for a while maybe she’ll sleep gently once again, piercing shadows won’t be at the bedside tonight not with the hint of that in-between edge of flight like fire and water, opposite lines and dots don’t meet eyes now aware, clear thoughts embrace her back to life. © ------------- CONTEST: Nancy Jones’ Fine Line

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 10/3/2011 8:07:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the "Fine Line" contest Nette. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/2/2011 3:23:00 PM
Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 10/1/2011 6:08:00 PM
heartfelt, its a shame our best writes have to come from such places of pain you are often an inspiration to me..congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 10/1/2011 2:30:00 PM
Congratulations Nette on your 1st place win.It is a great honour to share the 1st place with you!!
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Date: 10/1/2011 12:18:00 PM
Congratulations on the win in the contest of Nancy, nette
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Date: 10/1/2011 12:18:00 PM
Congratulations on the win in the contest of Nancy, nette
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Date: 10/1/2011 1:34:00 AM
Nette-this is another wonderfully penned emotional write...it reminds me of your What Easter Means to Me entry....how you were filled with soooo much emotion over the topic of Christ....in this write similar intensity of emotion is felt. Gonna borrow this for my favs box. Gorgeous write. Gwendolen
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Date: 10/1/2011 12:54:00 AM
Very well done. Great write Nette. Lee
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Date: 9/30/2011 11:16:00 PM
Congrats Nette luv on fabulous first place win so well deserved for quality lines so intense .. luv this piece.. enjoy top spot..
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Date: 9/30/2011 9:09:00 PM
This is terrific as all your writes seem to be.:) Yes....there is a tight line ...that fine line / ledge that often any one of us may face, and where we teter on the breaking point! Great job here!!! :)
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Date: 9/30/2011 8:32:00 PM
well, I wondered if this was you dear netteski. Your brilliant style shines and shines and shines. Thanks so much for the incredible write and for supporting my contest with it. Beauty eve, sistah. Namaste~N
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Date: 9/28/2011 5:52:00 PM
Great work to be in this very creative contest..Reads like winners' circle to me..Good luck in Nancy's contest..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 9/28/2011 2:40:00 PM
I think people can relate to this on certain levels, nette-- we all hide behind those laugh lines-- very nicely done-- hugs--btw sorry I missed your last contest! silly me I wrote one for it, yun nga lang exceeded the number of lines & di ko na naedit tapos nag brown out dahil bagyo!! oops!! sorry... :(
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Date: 9/28/2011 11:20:00 AM
well Nette luv I don't know how u continue to top yourself with dynamic words while mesmerizing us all but u do.. a creative masterpiece for Nancy's contest my friend.. felt the emotion deeply.. good luck luv..
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Date: 9/28/2011 9:34:00 AM
Nette, I'm sending you a hug and a prayer. Tony
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