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Just Down the Road

It was getting dark And they still hadn't reached Then suddenly the brakes screeched And on the side of the road they parked They were acutely aware That they were in the middle of nowhere As they looked at the map They found their mistake instead of turning left a right they did make So they doubled back to fill in the gap Then just down the road They saw an old house It was shuttered and closed And probably had its own ghost But they were hungry and tired And with nowhere else in sight They decided to spend the night As they entered the house, everything seemed alright But that was the last time they'd ever be seen The old hag that lived there was a killing machine A graveyard of cars by an old rusty gate Told the story of those who had met the same fate They had made the mistake of entering an abode That was in the middle of nowhere, and just down the road

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 1/15/2015 1:41:00 PM
Very descriptive story - I wasn't expecting the ending - many congrats hugs jan xx
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Date: 1/15/2015 7:23:00 AM
WOW, a powerful write and the last two lines really pack a punch. Congratulations Joseph on your fine win. Adding this to my fav poem list.
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Date: 1/15/2015 1:31:00 AM
Superb write Joseph! Congrats on big win!
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Date: 1/15/2015 1:14:00 AM
What a fantastic teaching here Joseph...don't enter an abode that is in the middle of nowhere...thank you for sharing and congrats on the win...huggs
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Date: 1/14/2015 10:39:00 PM
Joseph, Stopping by to say hi and wish you the best when it comes to any soup contest. Congratulations, on your win. Stop by my latest blog "A Penny For Your Thoughts." If you'd like:) Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 5/23/2014 10:05:00 PM
Congrats on fine win!!
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Date: 5/23/2014 9:19:00 PM
lovely win..>SKAT<
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Date: 5/20/2014 1:01:00 AM
It's a nice take on the theme of the contest. Congrats on the win, Joseh
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Date: 5/19/2014 4:37:00 PM
I enjoy horror writes; this worked for me. Congrats on your win, Joseph! // paul
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Date: 5/19/2014 8:55:00 AM
enjoyed the mood of this piece.. big cheers on your win, joseph.. huggs
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Date: 5/18/2014 7:35:00 PM
I love ghost stories and you told this one so well, Joseph. Your poem was the only one with a "horror" theme, so it really stood out to me! Great work! Congrats on your win!
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Date: 5/12/2014 3:40:00 PM
Hi Joseph, That was a wonderfully versed story from beginning to Very end.yikes! Well done. Thank you for visiting my page and leaving your kind words. Thanks for sharing. Very best in the contest. Peace, Deborah
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Date: 5/8/2014 9:35:00 PM
aha, I think this is the first terror tale I saw using this theme. SO that means you are unique!! Way to go. Hope to see it on the winners list
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Date: 5/8/2014 12:58:00 AM
Hi Joseph. Glad I dropped by, as this is a cool write. I enjoyed reading it. Kudos, my friend...~M
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Date: 5/7/2014 10:55:00 PM
Wow... I sure wasn't expecting that scenerio. Captivating all the way through... really enjoy a poem with a plot ... :)
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Date: 5/7/2014 9:32:00 AM
Suspense headed in the direction one would expect, but it kept me on the edge of my seat. A campfire tale if I'd heard one set to poetry. Enjoyable, Joseph.
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Date: 5/6/2014 3:35:00 PM
Yup, you think they have seen enough of the movies and have at least heard the tale of Hansel and Gretel? But nope every new generation forgets the lessons of their elders. Light & Love
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Date: 5/6/2014 8:27:00 AM
Cute one..Those that enter beware of whatever is lurking there..Sara
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Date: 5/6/2014 6:04:00 AM
Creative and enjoyable write on the theme of the contest, joseph
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Date: 5/5/2014 12:07:00 PM
If I get lost, I'm going to sleep in my car...lol. Good write Joseph. Hugs
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