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The Last Dance

Bell tolls at midnight Her glass slipper he shatters Danced on borrow time

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Liam Mcdaid

Date: 2/8/2015 3:19:00 PM

beautifully painted haiku joanmarie

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/30/2014 11:51:00 PM

Loved this one Joan, and I agree, I think "the last dance" would be a more fitting title!!!

David Meade

Date: 11/27/2014 7:14:00 PM

Love the haiku -- awesome last line that hooks the reader deeper into the last dance!! Lot's of rules on haiku -- I have broke all of them . . . keep writing them and I will keep reading them! If you are interested here is a link to some guideline, don't let it mess you up -- you have great talent: http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/haiku/haiku.html

Joanmarie Peranteau
Date: 11/28/2014 8:21:00 AM

My 9 yr old grandson introduced me to this form, for he was learning it in school, but after reading your link, I can see he gave me only the minimum basics of this form. I'm thinking of changing the title to "The Last Dance", bc of your comment.

Joanmarie Peranteau
Date: 11/28/2014 8:14:00 AM

Thank you for reading and your encouragement. This is my first attempt at this form, to tell the truth I have no knowledge or education in any of the many forms of poetry.

Jan Allison

Date: 11/27/2014 4:24:00 PM

beautiful imagery but so so sad:-) hugs Jan x

Joanmarie Peranteau
Date: 11/27/2014 5:07:00 PM

I appreciate your comment, your feed back. First time writing a Haiku poem.

Joanmarie Peranteau
Date: 11/27/2014 5:04:00 PM

Thank you Jan.