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Is There Something On Your Mind

So many days we have not talked, I surely felt a shift cause when we fin’ly did today, I failed to get the drift. I think there’s something missing now. In my room all alone did I just see the change in you that chilled me to my bone. I used to guess before you speak what you’d be saying next, it’s no longer the same it’s hard just to decipher text. There’s sadness in your eyes this time and you no longer care I got myself a new hairstyle but I lost all my hair. Now even my little attempts at humor would be met either by non-comment or worse, “How corny can you get?” Your eyes would always brighten up, you used to smile at me; but now you get cross-eyed and weird when it’s me that you see. You used to hug me all the time as river does the ground the air between us now is stale, no passion can be found. Do you now look far into space, or possibility of life tomorrow full of glee, a life where there's no me. Do you recall the day we met, when you were so cock sure, you did not see I'd wreak havoc to the lovely structure of your orderly life when you thought it’s just a detour; now that by dawn the passion’s gone, do you just say ”bonjour”? The whirlwind called romance just left, you have put up the mast; you’re set to sail, crude tongue till last, you say we had a blast! Well, poison’s in the juice you drank, please don’t think it’s unkind. An antidote? Why my dear, is there something on your mind?
Kim Patrice Nunez 01 July 2015 Is There Something You Want to Tell Me? Contest Sponsor: Judy Konos

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Date: 8/9/2015 10:15:00 AM
Great poem and I see it was a winner too. Congrats on that and it was a winner in my book regardless. A7
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Date: 7/15/2015 4:11:00 PM
A breakup full of humour and disbelief that someone that once loved you could change so drastically! Awesome write and I love the twist at the end...big congrats on your win! Hugs
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Date: 7/6/2015 8:31:00 PM
Kim, Congratulations on your win, SKAT love
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Date: 7/6/2015 12:31:00 AM
Enjoyed this congrats !
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Date: 7/5/2015 11:00:00 PM
Congrats on ur winning awesome write Kim!
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Date: 7/5/2015 9:21:00 PM
Hi Kim, Congrats on your win. LINDA
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Date: 7/5/2015 7:14:00 PM
Very funny. It's interesting that some of us may want to kill the person leaving us. You have captured that well. It's a bad day when leaving happens. Nice job, and we hope that never happens to us!
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Date: 7/5/2015 7:10:00 PM
Kim advice from my grandmother, "Don't worry what anyone thinks unless they pay your bills!" CHEERS
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Date: 7/5/2015 9:21:00 AM
Thank You for entering my contest.
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Date: 7/3/2015 7:41:00 PM
Hello Kim... a very enjoyable poem to read Kim. As serious as it could be in some situations I grinned right through your version of 'copping the cold shoulder' - thank you Kim - Lindsay
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Date: 7/3/2015 6:26:00 PM
Kim, absolutely wonderful, you have a gift lovely lady, this is a 10 and thanks for visiting my poem, the butterfly and the dragon
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Date: 7/3/2015 6:10:00 PM
Beautiful poem, Kim. . . the sudden change of coldness can be so confusing and painful. You expressed yourself so well here! It's always wonderful to read your work. Always, Laura
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Date: 7/3/2015 3:18:00 PM
Hi Kim - I saw you posted a comment in one of my poems. I'm Filipino too though based in Canada, now US. Hope you win this contest. Am just new here, so am just content browsing. BTW, I give this a vote of 7, but although I feel there's pain in the poem, it's so lightheartedly written, I give my hats off for such courage to deal with it.
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Date: 7/3/2015 1:50:00 PM
wow, I am quite impressed. You have given this topic real LIFE. I love how you did the challenge!!! Should get a high score!!
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Date: 7/2/2015 11:04:00 AM
A slice of black humour that makes for a most pleasant read, Kim!! Glad it's not addressed to me! gl in the contest. hugs // paul
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Date: 7/2/2015 12:04:00 AM
a fun read, enjoyed this.. good luck in the contest:) *luv, p.d.
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Date: 7/1/2015 8:00:00 PM
A chilling piece of work with clever rhymes. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 7/1/2015 4:51:00 PM
Hello Kim!! A great and compelling message here and best of luck in the contest. The humor of your write supports your theme perfectly. A "7" -- of course!! Best Always, Gary
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Date: 7/1/2015 1:51:00 PM
oooh - Seven, btw!
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Date: 7/1/2015 1:50:00 PM
I don't know Kim, I think you could almost use THIS text for the Pastel Reflection thing... It has that kind of melancholy vibe to it.
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Date: 7/1/2015 9:27:00 AM
better off without this baggage, kim.. so beautifully composed!... huggs
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Date: 7/1/2015 7:43:00 AM
I see you went for it, good for you. I think the form is couplet. You did in fact inject some humor which lightens it up a bit which is a good thing. Good luck in the contest.
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