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TIM SMITH HAS AMAZED ME AND HAS NOW MADE THIS INTO A SONNET - HE HAS POSTED IT ON HIS OWN PAGE

You want me, oh how you want me Some days I simply can’t wait to turn you on I leap on to you any time of the day or night And you always respond to my touch You crave every inch of my naked body Then you whisper words to me Oh how you can hurt me and I wish you would lie to me But you are always so brutally honest and I admire you for that Some days I love you Other days I would love to ditch you and I never want to see you again Guess we all have a love hate relationship with our bathroom scales Jan Allison 30th August 2014 Unable to enter it for contest as it is not a sonnet:

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Just James

Date: 5/2/2016 1:31:00 AM

Love it... I can see n sonnet

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2016 4:48:00 PM

:-) thanks James I'm so sorry I missed replying to this sooner:-( hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/1/2014 11:57:00 AM

hahaha that is hillarious! I dont own a scale, I never wanted to know my numbers, the only number I want to hear is my husbands telling me I'm a perfect 10. cool poem chicky :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/1/2014 1:19:00 PM

Aww your hubby sounds like a real gem:-) Hugs jan xx Tim did an awesome job rewriting this as a sonnet:-)

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 8/31/2014 10:17:00 AM

Bahahahaha. You had my eyebrows in a steady upward position, m mouth wide open, then those last two words just cracked me up. What a great poem Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/31/2014 12:16:00 PM

Thanks so much Brenda I do love a twist in the end:-) hugs jan xx

Toquyen Harrell

Date: 8/31/2014 12:30:00 AM

It's more like a hate relationship. Just kidding. The right one will come along haha

Jan Allison
Date: 8/31/2014 4:43:00 AM

LOL Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/30/2014 8:29:00 PM

oh baby how you want me, yes you do./ /Some days I cannot wait to turn you on./ In nakedness, I jump on top of you/ No matter if it's night or early dawn. (ok those are your first four lines, now go for it!!!)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2014 9:07:00 PM

I will work on it for fun lol Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/30/2014 8:25:00 PM

hahahah, I was thinking to myself, gosh, this many years of marriage and it's still like THIS. And then.... hmmm, it's a lover? hahahaha (I was thinking it was for the confessions contest). the bathroom scale. you are a hoot. you can do this as a sonnet. I just know you can.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2014 9:06:00 PM

LOL I do try and think out of the box - was walking up to my parents and this came into my head so had to get it written on a scrap of paper. Posted it then Tim did a sonnet - hes posted it now:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/30/2014 4:45:00 PM

Ahh!! Great personification..Way to go..Rewrite it into a sonnet..Thanks for the visit..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2014 4:49:00 PM

Tim has re-written it and submitted it to the contest with my blessing Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/30/2014 3:32:00 PM

Ha ha, this is cute. I don't even own a bathroom scale. I am probably about 10 pounds over weight but I don't worry about it. I have never been on a diet in my life.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2014 3:37:00 PM

LOl Thanks Richard. i've never dieted either but have lost quite a lot of weight recently - probably stress but its getting checked out:-) hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/30/2014 1:35:00 PM

Never mind but it's so very lovely Jan! Impressive expression of sentiment , great great great !

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2014 1:39:00 PM

Thanks Dr Sharma and Tim has done a great job making it into a sonnet:-) Hugs jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 8/30/2014 12:43:00 PM

By the way why don't you rewrite the same poem as a sonnet. I did that with the through the mist contest. also if this helps to encourage the re-write. You should know I lost that contest.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 8/31/2014 9:39:00 AM

i know a good international lawyer. i like the way you spoke in code. but i hear plagerism in your words. we'll wait until he wins then we'll sue and add that trophy to your collection. wink wink say no more say no more.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2014 12:49:00 PM

Tim has already re-written it and posted it on his page with my blessing I think he did a great job and if he wins the contest it would be excellent. Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 8/30/2014 12:39:00 PM

wow i love the imagery. it is so clear and so simple to understand. i really like relationship poetry. it's wonderful that the narrator is married to a scale. we've come a long way in our society. reminds me of cultures that live in the mountains where men are men and the sheep are nervous.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2014 12:47:00 PM

Ha Ha Ha Maurice you do make me smile with your witty comments. How do you scare a welsh sheep... shout naked farmer - oh boy it makes them run so fast:-) hugs Jan xxx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/30/2014 9:31:00 AM

:) I loved this Jan. I was wondering what was going on until that last line! ;)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2014 11:45:00 AM

I decided to think out of the box for the contest and realised i couldn't submit it as i hadn't read the rules and it had to be a sonnet but Tim has done an amazing job and surprised me with a great sonnet so he hopefully will enter that:-) Hugs Jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 8/30/2014 8:57:00 AM

The scales that break my heart are "fish scales"....they're either too light or too short to keep. Nice write, loved the humor, thanks for the chuckle.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2014 11:43:00 AM

LOl John and the one that got away was a whopper I guess! thanks for the comment it made me smile too:-) hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 8/30/2014 8:08:00 AM

Brilliant Jan....I don't even own a scale.....hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2014 8:11:00 AM

LOL I am sure most women do own them and have a lot hate relationship with them - mine shows me I need to put weight on! Hugs Jan xx