Get Your Premium Membership

In Clara's Light

Awake, he felt asleep and struggled, for it seemed upon his back there had been flung a mantle of fatigue he drably wore, and like a hag accursed, to him it clung. His children, sad to see his heavy pace, then fixed him up with Clara, widowed too. He floundered when he saw her sweet bright face and gazed into her eyes of crystal blue. Immersed in Clara's radiance, he dined and listening to her laugh, became entranced. His burden cloak unraveled as she twined her arms around his shoulders while they danced. An ardent kiss. . . and then was gone that coat. For with a jolt, he saw that he could float!
For Deb Guzzi's "Celebrate the Light" Poetry Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

12
Date: 10/21/2020 10:01:00 PM
I was charmed by this romantic resurrection of the soul. So uplifting. Certainly worthy of the win you achieved with it. Who wouldn't want to be around someone like Clara?
Login to Reply
Date: 4/6/2013 9:57:00 AM
I love this, it's full of whimsy and radiance. The third stanza is my favorite, it is so kinetic and the rhyming is sublime there, and indeed throughout. Great work, Andrea. -Jeremy
Login to Reply
Date: 1/6/2012 5:26:00 AM
Hi Andrea just checking this out, yes a worthy winner indeed, brings to mind one aspect as well, i miss so much here on soup, although spending quite a while here over the holidays, i'm only able to read and comment on a fraction of poems here. such a shame, harry
Login to Reply
Date: 12/29/2011 11:38:00 AM
Wow another win congrats to you. Did not get out of town as we are down with freezing rain and to dangerous for a long drive. The temp is around 0 to -5 but with the ice you can hardly walk-looks like a skating rink. love phyl
Login to Reply
Date: 12/28/2011 10:30:00 PM
Congratulation my friend. Enjoyed both write and your supper win. bl
Login to Reply
Date: 12/28/2011 10:45:00 AM
Andrea ,a big congratulations on your win.I have emailed this poem to one of my email address.This is a good way to keep the poems with you and I think I have faved it.Thanx for your congrats message at my page.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/28/2011 5:09:00 AM
Congratulations Andrea. Love, Carol
Login to Reply
Date: 12/27/2011 7:57:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Andrea! You told a beautiful story. Kim
Login to Reply
Date: 12/27/2011 6:06:00 PM
Congratulations, Andrea!
Login to Reply
Date: 12/27/2011 5:19:00 PM
nicely done Andrea. Very nicely done. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
Login to Reply
Date: 12/27/2011 4:10:00 PM
Congrats, Andrea...this is outta sight! What an incredibly competitive feat.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/27/2011 3:21:00 PM
hmmm just GREAT Andie but I totld you that :P Congrad's hon I do love the sonnet form aye you have me peged. Light & Love
Login to Reply
Date: 12/27/2011 2:47:00 AM
Wow Andrea, another great poem from your pen! Wish you best of luck for Deb's contest! Take care...Hugs...Gert:)
Login to Reply
Date: 12/24/2011 7:54:00 PM
this is lovely :) and yes, i would block her. her comments below are a mix of confusing and disturbing. i don't know who she was calling a whore, catie or you, but that's uncalled for. she is like a virus...
Login to Reply
Date: 12/24/2011 11:50:00 AM
Andrea a knockout sonnet, good luck for the contest and happy holidays..David
Login to Reply
Date: 12/23/2011 2:58:00 PM
Oh surely a most excellent write and sonnet to my fav's! Happy Holy Days!
Login to Reply
Date: 12/23/2011 1:20:00 PM
Another gem from your gifted pen , AD . Best of everything to you and yours for Christmas and 2012 ...
Login to Reply
Date: 12/23/2011 11:56:00 AM
WoW Girlfriend you are the poet of light. This is too cool plus 5.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/23/2011 9:06:00 AM
I love this one, Andrea - sure to be a winner. Thanks very much - loved your contest. Many congrats on all your wins too, my friend - and wishing you a great xmas : )
Login to Reply
Mcknight Avatar
Journey Mcknight
Date: 12/23/2011 10:44:00 AM
L
Date: 12/22/2011 11:31:00 PM
Sonnet is your forte Andrea.You have weaved a lovely story and the ending is very uplifting.Best wishes for the contest.
Login to Reply
Mcknight Avatar
Journey Mcknight
Date: 12/23/2011 8:45:00 AM
L
Date: 12/22/2011 10:33:00 PM
What a beautiful story. Love this. Should do well in the contest. Good Luck and thanks for the great review. Don't know much about midwest. Lived all my early life in Fla before coming to Canada. Never got out of a 380mile radius. God Bless and Merry Christmas my friend. JB
Login to Reply
Mcknight Avatar
Journey Mcknight
Date: 12/23/2011 8:45:00 AM
LC
Date: 12/22/2011 9:23:00 PM
Wow! Awesome piece! Always, Laura
Login to Reply
Mcknight Avatar
Journey Mcknight
Date: 12/23/2011 8:45:00 AM
L
Date: 12/22/2011 8:16:00 PM
So she swept him off his feet...loved it !! True love has a way of doing that. Wonderful poem, good luck !!
Login to Reply
Mcknight Avatar
Journey Mcknight
Date: 12/23/2011 8:46:00 AM
cindy cayton- L
Date: 12/22/2011 7:32:00 PM
he must of really thought she was it,,lol,,,,,love the story,,wonderful poem,,, women do change our lives so much...
Login to Reply
Mcknight Avatar
Journey Mcknight
Date: 12/23/2011 8:43:00 AM
LLC
Date: 12/22/2011 6:15:00 PM
Love it. Echoes of: "...in the fire of spring the winter garment of repentance fling. The bird of time has but a little way to fly and, lo, the bird is on the wing."
Login to Reply
Mcknight Avatar
Journey Mcknight
Date: 12/23/2011 8:48:00 AM
Journey_ your games are done, this is clearly plagerism, and is highly against anything under the sun...if you think you can continue this you are WRONG! I will see to it!!!!! Mrs. Journey Mcknight!
Mcknight Avatar
Journey Mcknight
Date: 12/23/2011 8:39:00 AM
like you reading my most desirous write of giving a perfumed oiled cloak of ylang, myrhh, and patchioloi, it is because I am not that way naturally.... exceelnt plagerism of an idea! congratualtions and luck in the contest!
12

Book: Reflection on the Important Things