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In a Hotel Room

For a long time there I stood; Yet another entrance to hell. Though I already understood, There's this feeling I can't tell. Scent of sin present in the air Reminder of what I must do. Life has not been all that fair, Still, I wish today is untrue. The door to hell is inviting; Smiling, out the devil came. His touch had been inciting But I felt nothing but shame. There I was, in a hotel room; Sold both my body and soul. Flower that will never bloom; Never again to be put whole. By him I let myself get tainted; And I will go to hell and back, To keep my beloved child sated. There will be no turning back. *For the "In A Hotel Room" contest *Written: February 12, 2013

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Date: 2/20/2013 1:59:00 AM
Many Congratulations on your win Grushen sorry i am a bit late xx
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Grushen Guazon
Date: 2/24/2013 12:23:00 AM
It's alright. As they say, better late than never right? *joke*. Thank you for your comment. :)
Date: 2/20/2013 1:35:00 AM
Good job! - Your hotel is 7 star! - Congratulations! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Grushen Guazon
Date: 2/24/2013 12:21:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to write a comment. Thank you so much. :)
Date: 2/19/2013 8:39:00 PM
A sad one very well described. Congrats on your win . It was well deserved.
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Grushen Guazon
Date: 2/24/2013 12:19:00 AM
Thank you vety much. :) Thank you for liking my simple poem. :)
Date: 2/19/2013 5:09:00 PM
The old, old storywell retold.. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Grushen Guazon
Date: 2/24/2013 12:17:00 AM
Thank you. I often write poems about love, life and poverty. It's easier for me to draw a painful picture than those happy pictires. :)
Date: 2/19/2013 4:15:00 PM
Grushen, CONGRATULATIONS :-) ~ love your awesome winning poem in Susan's contest.. take care.. PD
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Grushen Guazon
Date: 2/24/2013 12:14:00 AM
Thank you very much. :) Thank you for all your encouraging words. I appreciate all your comments. :)
Date: 2/13/2013 5:44:00 AM
Nice write :) Best of Luck for the contest
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Grushen Guazon
Date: 2/19/2013 5:11:00 AM
Thank you so much!!! :)
Date: 2/12/2013 10:18:00 AM
No nice experience in a hotel room Grushen - Well written. - Good luck in the contest. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Grushen Guazon
Date: 2/12/2013 10:36:00 AM
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. It's a scene from a story I never finished writing. I tend to write sad poems, I have no idea why. :) Some of which I never experienced. Sorry, I said too much. :) Again, thank you very much!
Date: 2/12/2013 10:03:00 AM
I loved it! Nice job.
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Grushen Guazon
Date: 2/12/2013 10:13:00 AM
Thank you so much! :)

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