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If You Believe

Poet took a high-falutin' leap of faith, amidst a big swig of moonbeams dabbling toes beyond starry galaxies Milky Way spun in translations Pluto still looked oddly perplexed, Big Dipper gave a smart **** grimace wondering what the hell was going on 'neath the stratosphere when human beings can't keep their heads 'neath ambiguous clouds feet firmly planted ground level, delving lofty heaven's bliss escaping the wrath of hell's fire, aggrandizing endless poesy that absorbs sparks of a universal desire never phasing sun's obstinance, but, if you believe in poetry there's no telling where boundless skies will surrender ...and the man in the moon tilted on his axis in a backward's spiral and unabashedly winked

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Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 10/13/2016 11:07:00 AM

Oh that Man in the Moon....I still have a score to settle with that guy! He caused a little trouble in my poem "Sharing The Night We're Under", but in your poem he works out beautifully LOL! Very nice Paloma! MC

Paloma P
Date: 10/13/2016 2:37:00 PM

Ha, I'm not sure you'll win that fight. The moon usually wins. Thanks so much MC! :)

Anthony Mark

Date: 10/12/2016 12:25:00 AM

Clever write, the enjambment keeps the roll going good, enough visuals to satisfy, with a solid ending, ...well done...Ian

Paloma P
Date: 10/12/2016 7:48:00 AM

Thanks Ian, very much appreciated.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 10/11/2016 9:52:00 PM

Hi Paloma, loved the imagery in this one. It had so many good lines that i don't need to put them down. I would just have to re-write the poem here. The surreal imagery of the poetic mind. An excellent write Paloma. This has to be a seven. Hugs....Mike. XX

Paloma P
Date: 10/12/2016 7:48:00 AM

Wow I'm flattered Mike, thank you!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/11/2016 3:31:00 PM

beautiful and filled with amazing imagery, Paloma.

Paloma P
Date: 10/12/2016 7:47:00 AM

Many thanks Andrea.

Dm Babbit

Date: 10/11/2016 1:36:00 PM

I like it, every word brought clear and flowing images to my mind's eye.

Paloma P
Date: 10/12/2016 7:46:00 AM

Thank you DM.

Lu Loo

Date: 10/11/2016 12:11:00 PM

"delving lofty heaven's bliss escaping the wrath of hell's fire"...wonderful lines Paloma...loved this one :)-luloo

Paloma P
Date: 10/12/2016 7:45:00 AM

Thanks luloo, love that. ;)

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 10/11/2016 11:57:00 AM

"smart arse grimace" "ambiguous clouds" "sun's obstinance"......I liked these metaphors. Lovely.

Paloma P
Date: 10/12/2016 7:45:00 AM

I do love a metaphor, thanks Rajat.

Chris Green

Date: 10/11/2016 11:55:00 AM

I though I saw him winking. :) Now this one orbits around my mind allowing me to boldly go where no man has gone before. Well, most men haven't. All funning aside Paloma, this poem paints galaxies in vivid poetic colors, no black holes in this one. Another amazing piece.

Paloma P
Date: 10/12/2016 7:44:00 AM

There's a poem in there somewhere. :) Thanks Chris!