I Am a 8

We come alone, and alone we depart, This journey compels us to play our part. Come now, no one stays for eternity's span, We come alone, and alone we depart. How can the moon conceal its glow? He stands first and last, this truth we know. We come alone, and alone we depart, This journey compels us to play our part. Copyright 20/9/14 form written for a contest. path no: 8 destiny no: 8

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Tim Smith

Date: 10/5/2014 2:44:00 PM

Congrats Malik on the win....cheers Tim

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/4/2014 8:46:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Malik

Jan Allison

Date: 10/4/2014 7:31:00 AM

Dropping back with my congratulations Malik:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/4/2014 6:31:00 AM

Congrats on the win, nice write, Malik

Ma Yaseen
Date: 10/4/2014 7:13:00 AM

Thanks Dr. Mehta

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/4/2014 2:24:00 AM

I really love the theme of your poem. It was just line two that repeated at the end that was strange for me. congratulations in my contest. You wrote a very nice triolet. Love the imagery of the moon hiding under chiffon!

Ma Yaseen
Date: 10/4/2014 3:10:00 AM

well thanks for liking the theme and imagery Dear Andrea, you are so kind.... I cannot understand how the line was strange to you, Can you please elucidate it a bit?// Malik

Paul Callus

Date: 9/28/2014 7:50:00 AM

Ahhh so you have a double 8, Malik! Is that supposed to be lucky?! Enjoyed your triolet....deep and intriguing. gl in the contest. // paul

Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/28/2014 11:05:00 PM

Yeah I never knew it, Now I know and feel like being lucky. Thanks Paul for your time and the kind words.. God bless you. Malik

J.W. Earnings

Date: 9/27/2014 12:17:00 AM

Awesome poem. Wow, a simple poem, but a profound, great message.

Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/28/2014 2:50:00 AM

thanks for dropping by,David.... Keep visiting,,, God bless you

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/25/2014 12:52:00 AM

Eventually, every beginning has to meet it's end, and we all have to learn to except that.... I enjoyed this deep and soulful write. Great work, Malik! Good luck in Andrea's contest!

Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/25/2014 1:41:00 AM

Many many thanks for your remarkable words,, Stay blessed

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/24/2014 9:32:00 PM

Nice Triolet Malik. Good luck on the contest.

Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/24/2014 11:02:00 PM

thanks Brenda for stopping by and for the comment.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/24/2014 9:24:00 AM

- My "lucky numbers are 8" - A lovely write to the contest, Malik! - I wish you luck and hope you win - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/24/2014 11:01:00 PM

Wow, that is great, i have not considered any number yet, Thanks for your visit Anne always.

Darlene Gifford

Date: 9/23/2014 12:13:00 AM

I, too, shake your hand on this poem well written. Good luck in the contest, I enjoyed reading your triolet.

Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/23/2014 12:15:00 AM

woo, then good if you too are 8,,, thanks for your time and the wishes...

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/21/2014 8:26:00 AM

such a beautiful vision painted wxcellent

Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/21/2014 11:33:00 PM

Thanks Liam for your visit

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/21/2014 8:04:00 AM

A beautiful poem and a fine read, thank you.

Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/21/2014 11:33:00 PM

Thanks a lot Mr. Maurice

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 9/21/2014 4:13:00 AM

Have no idea what a Triolet is, for that reason only on the content I am ready to comment which I find deep and thought provoking! Beautiful, my friend Malik! Good luck with the contest!

Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/21/2014 4:40:00 AM

thanks Sir for your appreciating words..

Jan Allison

Date: 9/20/2014 10:00:00 AM

lovely triolet Malik good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/21/2014 2:05:00 AM

Thanks Jan for stopping by. god bless you.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/20/2014 8:04:00 AM

Perfectly done triolet. You have to write your date of birth and month if it is for the contest. Please give once over to the rules of the contest.

Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/21/2014 2:04:00 AM

thanks sir for stooping by and a nice comment, I have mentioned it there, is it like if i edited it here, it will automatically get edited there?? i dint know about this, if you can help me out here?