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Humble Pie

He prepared the pie With greatest care Within the pot My brains and hair For hers had been A lofty perch Just a peg or two Would never do Cremated remains Formed the shell Into the plate My crushed bones fell I could still see But could not yell The pie's aroma A story to tell My innards baked Hour by hour The smell of blood And blackened flour Words poured in Enhanced the flavour The humble pie For her to savour Fork to mouth My body consumed From the plate My heart exhumed The baker says She's eating crow The taste is bitter She eats the pie slow The true recipe He does not show Humble pies plentiful Stacked row on row The victims many Some you may know If he invites you I beg you not to go! For Sheri's Plentitude of Pie Contest, I went with a halloween twist.

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/10/2014 9:03:00 AM

Thanks to all, I would like to respond individually but time is short.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 12/9/2014 9:14:00 AM

Dropping back with my congratulations Richard.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 12/9/2014 8:52:00 AM

Love the title, congrats on the win

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 12/8/2014 3:37:00 PM

Love the twist on this one - brilliant, clever write! Please accept my hearty congratulations on your fine win, Richard! Best wishes, Pandita.

Paul Callus

Date: 12/8/2014 2:37:00 PM

Back with deserved congrats, Richard. I told you it would do better than mine...and it sure did:) // paul

Roy Jerden

Date: 12/8/2014 2:24:00 PM

Dinner at Hannibal's... Loved the theme and the poem! Congratulations!

Jan Allison

Date: 12/8/2014 11:39:00 AM

dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs jan xx

Sheri Fresonke Harper

Date: 12/8/2014 10:51:00 AM

Richard, I love the Halloween twist to your pie mix. Thanks for entering the pie contest, truly wonderful submissions sent in, congratulations on your win.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 11/9/2014 8:00:00 AM

Well let's hope I never have to eat humble pie, although I did love that band in the 70's. Good morning Rick, have missed reading your poetry.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/9/2014 11:36:00 AM

Well, I am off to see what you have come up with. Thanks for making my morning pleasurable. I enjoy your company.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/26/2014 4:37:00 AM

This is a very creative take on the challenge. As always a masterful write.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/26/2014 8:13:00 AM

Thanks Maurice.

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/25/2014 8:52:00 AM

I love it Rick! You took this write in a great direction, I really enjoyed reading this wondrous poem this morning! Thank you for referring me to this illustrious poem! What a perfect Halloween twist you have written here! Great Work!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/25/2014 9:19:00 AM

Thanks Russel, I am pleased you enjoyed it.

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 10/22/2014 8:41:00 AM

How humble the baker is! at least for his umbles. love....rajat

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/22/2014 9:06:00 AM

Thanks Rajat.

Paul Callus

Date: 10/19/2014 7:06:00 AM

Yours is a unique take on the pie theme, Richard....a poem that should stand out among the others, mine included! I think I'll miss out on pie next time round:) // paul

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2014 7:44:00 AM

Ha ha, I don't blame you, also I doubt you would qualify for an invitation to eat humble pie.

Justin Bordner

Date: 10/18/2014 6:25:00 PM

I love this morbid brlliance, deathly and grainy in lesson of humility Richard. Havent we all felt like this at some point, not vicims, but casualities of arrogance served on Karma's warm plate. "Blackened flour" really holds the meaning for me, just stupendous Richard, a FAV! Justin

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/18/2014 6:47:00 PM

I like how you have interpreted my piece, you are on the mark my friend.

Kim Van Breda

Date: 10/18/2014 4:51:00 AM

Hi Richard Quite a poem of contrasting themes and ideals. I found myself between .. the .. "ew... disgusting" .. to " that is so true". Great write as always Xx~Xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/18/2014 7:05:00 AM

Good morning Kim. Thanks for reading and commenting.

James Fraser

Date: 10/17/2014 12:49:00 PM

Now this is certainly different. Thank goodness it's chicken for supper, and not pie. Good luck in the contest Richard. You never know 'the pies the limits for you' - James :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/18/2014 7:07:00 AM

Ha ha, good choice my friend.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/17/2014 4:56:00 AM

now thats what i call a pie richard excellent pen dear friend smiling

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/17/2014 7:02:00 AM

It may not be what the Judge is looking for but I wanted to take the theme in a compleatly different direction. I'm glad I can add a smile to your day. Thanks for commenting.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/17/2014 12:43:00 AM

... you didn't just watch Sweeney Todd did you? It reminds me of that except there's no barber. What I thought was creepy about this write was the fact that you described it as if you were still alive... while being eaten. Best of luck on the contest!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/17/2014 7:06:00 AM

Good morning Timothy, no I haven't been watching Sweeny Tod *lol* if I can draw on any influence, perhaps Stephen King although I rarely write in this genre. This one kind of wrote it self. Thanks for the luck Timothy.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2014 9:59:00 PM

this one is VERY creepy, Richard, which is a GOOD thing for being unique in the contest and also for Halloween theme. it reminds me of Sweeny Todd. GREAT stuff.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/17/2014 7:08:00 AM

Interesting that I have two Sweeny Todd references, thanks for the encouraging visit.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2014 9:57:00 PM

I agree with what you said on my Time Heals All. I think I will go to it and take off the word "all" now let me see this one here!!!

Robert Lindley

Date: 10/16/2014 8:44:00 PM

Humble pie, I have eaten lots in my time on this spinning blue marble my friend. Your write excels in that dish... A superb write and good luck in that contest. A 7..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2014 8:58:00 PM

Thanks, for the kind comment, have another peek I am now finished writing it.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/16/2014 7:49:00 PM

I love how you brought Halloween into this Richard but I am feeling a little queasy.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2014 8:59:00 PM

Thanks Brenda, it is now finished. It may make you a bit more queasy.

Casarah Nance

Date: 10/16/2014 7:00:00 PM

That is good! I like the take on the theme. and the spirit of halloween you put along with it, best of luck to you in the contest sweetie.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2014 9:02:00 PM

Hi Casarah, it is now complete. Also have a look at my bio poem and tell me if I have gone to far.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2014 7:06:00 PM

I am doing a rewrite, I wanted to get it into the contest before it closed. Check back in a few hours.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/16/2014 6:10:00 PM

ooh deep and dark Richard not a pie I fancy eating:-) good luck with the contest:-) hugs jan xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2014 2:29:00 AM

Its exceptional Richard i feel chilled reading it - could do with a nice slice of pie to warm me up now! hugs jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2014 8:57:00 PM

Check my final offering.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2014 6:32:00 PM

You sure did - its a great take on the theme:-) hugs jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2014 6:30:00 PM

Thanks Jan, I wanted to take a different approach.