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How Much More Pain Can My Heart Endure

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My heart is broken Shattered like smashed glass Shards pierce my tortured soul All I can do is ask …… why? Why … why did you desert me when I needed you so … You smiled that smile for the last time The smile that attracted me to you in the first place Your mouth curling up at the corners revealing those dimples… Oh I could never resist dimples … You were surrounded by machines … they were keeping you alive Then suddenly the machine stopped beeping … There was nothing else that could be done Goodbye my love …….. gone forever My thanks to Arthur Vaso for bringing this form called Infinite Dot Thirteen Verse to my attention 4th April 2015

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Sharon Gulley

Date: 4/13/2015 9:12:00 AM

This made me cry, Jan. I was so moved by this sad story and also delighted to have had the chance to read it. This is the first time I heard of or seen this form of write and it was sure to delight. Hugs and smiles, Jan. Thank you for sharing...Sharon G.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 9:13:00 AM

Thanks Sharon I was so glad Arthur got poem of the day for his 'mega death' poem:-) Hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 4/7/2015 11:09:00 PM

I enjoyed reading this beautiful write, a 7. Blessings and hugs dear friend Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 4/8/2015 2:09:00 AM

Thanks Eve I enjoyed this challenge:-) Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 4/5/2015 6:16:00 PM

I just did one for Arthur too, yours was wow, hugs.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2015 6:24:00 PM

oh fab Cas I thought you would have a go at this form - I'm really pleased with the comments I've had: -) hugs jan xx

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/5/2015 6:06:00 PM

A heartwrenching poem dear friend,yet so beautifully penned.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2015 6:10:00 PM

Thanks so much Charmaine - it only took a short time to write - i was inspired by Arthur's poem Mega death:-) Hugs jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 4/5/2015 1:44:00 AM

strikingly tragic and sad...//olive eloisa

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2015 2:30:00 AM

Thanks so much Olive:-) Hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 4/4/2015 3:08:00 PM

This is a new form to me, Jan. I notice that it's made up of 13 lines. You manage to transmit the feeling of an aching heart with inspired words. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2015 5:41:00 PM

thanks so much for the lovely comment Paul I am so pleased I attempted this - i was inspired by Arthur's amazing poem:-) Hugs jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 4/4/2015 12:41:00 PM

Heartfelt and extremely powerful emotions flowing throughout. Just imagine how such a write would be if it was reality. This is a wow Jan, hugs//xx//James

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2015 5:40:00 PM

Thanks James:-) hugs jan xx

James Fraser
Date: 4/4/2015 12:49:00 PM

Respite is with you Jan. It's your turn to live a little, go for it as I am soon, always hugs for you, James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2015 12:45:00 PM

Thankfully it is pure imagination on my part James - I am so glad I wasn't there with dad at the end I don't think i could have coped - not that he was on any machines or the like. Am in such a good place my friend - despite the poems I am coming up with i have to simply go with the flow of my pen:-) Hugs jan xx

Len Gasun

Date: 4/4/2015 11:22:00 AM

A very beautiful poem although there's sadness in it. A great write my dear friend, Jan! Thank you so much for sharing! And, have a blessed Lenten and Easter Season! love lots and biggest hug, Leonora

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2015 11:31:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Leonora:-) hugs jan xx

Tonytocaa Camacho

Date: 4/4/2015 10:15:00 AM

Jan,very endearing although painful,I understand,peace to your heart and your soul ..hugs to you and yours,always tonytocaa

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2015 11:30:00 AM

Thanks as ever for your support Tony:-) Hugs jan xx

Emile Pinet

Date: 4/4/2015 8:58:00 AM

Well penned, when it comes from the heart it shines with love and drips with talent. Emile. #7

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2015 11:30:00 AM

You are always so kind in your comments Emile:-) Hugs jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 4/4/2015 2:02:00 AM

Great write, Jan, very moving. I spent many days of twelve hour shifts at my Mother's bedside in hospital until I was told to take a day off, exhausted. That was the day she went, and I was the only family member not there at the time. Took some getting over, I can tell you. Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2015 6:01:00 AM

This is totally a fiction write on my behalf Viv - I can't begin to imagine the pain you felt not being their at the end but you had been their for her before and your health was suffering - dad passed about 15 minutes after they called us to go up to the hospice but we know it was his way not for us to be there at the end - he didn't even want us to accompany the hearse to the crematorium. Love and hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/3/2015 9:22:00 PM

A nice and sad poem created from this form. I never heard of it, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2015 9:23:00 PM

I was inspired by Arthur Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Edward Ebbs

Date: 4/3/2015 8:48:00 PM

Beautifully written, this is so sad Jan...I'm afraid to ask after you lost a parent :(

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2015 9:01:00 PM

Pure fiction on my part I was simply inspired by Arthur's poem - With dad we arrived at hospice too late - he'd slipped away peacefully with no pain and no machines - just a blessing he is at peace now:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/3/2015 8:43:00 PM

This really is sad but beautifully written!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2015 8:58:00 PM

Thanks Armand I was inspired by Arthur's fabulous poem Mega death:-) hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 4/3/2015 7:44:00 PM

G'day Jan... as sad as your poem, it is beautifully written and heart wrenching. Thank you Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2015 7:54:00 PM

Thanks Laurie I am just grateful to Arthur for the inspiration - he has such an amazing way with words :-) Hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/3/2015 7:32:00 PM

Wow, this is amazing!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2015 7:35:00 PM

Thanks for the inspiration Arthur it would never have been written if I hadn't read your brilliant poem:-) Hugs Jan xx

Robert Heemstra

Date: 4/3/2015 7:24:00 PM

Nothing like reading a tear-jerker before bed. A very nice read.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2015 7:26:00 PM

Thanks Robert:-) It is a form I am not familiar with and was inspired to try it for myself after I read Mega Death by Arthur Vaso:-) Hugs Jan xx