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dust laden kids toys in a box in the attic when will they come down? a tiny heart beats pain and joy are intertwined dusted teddy waits Top Haiku question Timothy Hicks Bottom Haiku conclusion Richard Lamoureux Poem the result of my asking about a form that Tim had written.

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Date: 5/16/2013 3:22:00 PM
The dust and the Teddy Bear are like The Wind And The Lion . Love the image in the theater of the mind. The attic and the basement are places where dreams go to die or sometimes come back to life. Nice read thank you Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2013 5:06:00 PM
Thanks Michael, each time I see your avatar I think of a young Rod Stewart.
Date: 5/12/2013 12:46:00 PM
Congratulations to both of you on your fine haikus. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2013 5:05:00 PM
Thanks Matthew. You have the same name as my son. Your name means gift from God.
Date: 5/12/2013 12:09:00 AM
a touching one this is. And a really nice form.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/12/2013 6:46:00 AM
Thanks Andrea
Date: 5/11/2013 8:14:00 PM
These are very good Richard ....enjoyed them a lot...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/11/2013 8:24:00 PM
Thanks Donna I hope you have a special day tomorrow.
Date: 5/11/2013 7:26:00 PM
Hope teddy gets lots of hugs! Good job you two! Don't laugh, but I still have a teddy a friend gave to me when I was in the States....when I'm awfully lonely or sad...(with my daughter away and hubby traveling it happens)...teddy shares my bed. :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/11/2013 8:25:00 PM
I never had a teddy bear, I had a big stuffed dog I called bully.
Date: 5/11/2013 3:48:00 PM
This is fun and I think it turned out great :) The 'tiny heart beat' was a nice touch. Now that I've read this all the way through I halfway regret putting the word "kids" in there. Isn't it obvious toys are for kids? Lol... I'll let you know when I come up with something for the second mondo!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 5/11/2013 7:23:00 PM
Naughty Richard! ;)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/11/2013 3:53:00 PM
Adults have toys as well but that may be for a different audiance, *lol*
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/11/2013 3:52:00 PM
so glad you like it, it was fun.
Date: 5/11/2013 3:22:00 PM
Thanks Freddie
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Date: 5/11/2013 11:48:00 AM
I like the haiku Richard, I don't like storing toys. I don't think the dust will do them any good... However, i hope teddy falls into the arms of a loving child.. a good home, a home that will not store him away... Linda
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/11/2013 11:53:00 AM
I agree we should take them out so that we are the benificiaries of all those smiles. As I read this poem I now realize it can be taken more than one way. I hope it is not a source of pain as that would be my last intention.

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