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haiku 7

barefoot I walk
upon the hard cold concrete --
above me clouds

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  1. Date: 9/1/2012 5:33:00 AM
    Nice little haiku, Debbie! Your three short lines speak volumes! Lots of love, Jack

  1. Date: 8/31/2012 11:50:00 PM
    Interesting haiku..Concrete surface made by man OR A man's body seems to be concrete....

    Guzzi Avatar Debbie Guzzi
    Date: 9/1/2012 6:27:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    since in all haiku [but modern most specifically the bulk of the poem is in the readers may see..feell hear what you will, in modern haiku the subjective is alluded to too and attempts are made to use IMPLIED metaphor & BOTH Kash
  1. Date: 8/31/2012 9:36:00 PM
    Very nice haiku Debbie.

  1. Date: 8/31/2012 11:40:00 AM
    I really like the contrast of this haiku, Debs. Very modern.

    Guzzi Avatar Debbie Guzzi
    Date: 8/31/2012 11:43:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    yup modern not traditional ;)
  1. Date: 8/30/2012 9:41:00 PM
    Good one Debbie...I see it !!

  1. Date: 8/30/2012 7:03:00 PM
    Yes, you are right about the little surprise. Your haiku above is the perfect example. I love it...I made some changes to my autumn haiku. I was thinking too much about the contest and not enough about the haiku form. I think they're better. Thanks so much, Debbie! Hugs, Rhonda

  1. Date: 8/30/2012 6:09:00 PM
    simpcity yet deeply moving in such an eloquent way, I so enjoyed your Haiku, Much Love, Cindy

  1. Date: 8/30/2012 5:36:00 PM
    very nice. It brings to mind that mankind has left his mark on the earth. hugs, Catie :)