Haiku 10

Then we are in flames, strung like pearls on a silk thread. Wrestling in the night.

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Heather Ober

Date: 3/6/2013 7:51:00 AM

Wow, the imagery here is outstanding!! This is such a unique haiku - I love it. (And thank you for all of your kind comments! They are always appreciated!)

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/6/2013 8:39:00 AM

Thanks for your comment. I enjoy haiku, especially the compression and abstraction. My comments on your writing are well-deserved. Jack

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/27/2013 4:46:00 PM

I see you used wrestling in the night again. this one I love the middle line!!

Jack Jordan
Date: 2/27/2013 5:10:00 PM

I used the repeat because they seemed to relate to each other quite well. I probably should have made it a double as I did on 17. I just didn't think to do so. J

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/14/2013 10:45:00 AM

Lovely, Jack! - Happy Valentine's day! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 2/14/2013 1:14:00 PM

Thanks! And a happy day to you too. J