Haiku 103

Haiku 103 my being’s deepbreath I slowly e x h a l e

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Date: 9/25/2019 11:41:00 AM

Unique haiku, Jack!

Date: 12/3/2013 6:35:00 PM

like what you did with the spacing of exhale nicely done

Jack Jordan
Date: 12/3/2013 8:15:00 PM

Thank you, Joseph. It was an experiment... Jack

Date: 12/2/2013 8:27:00 PM

I hope the day improved as it went along Jack.

Date: 12/2/2013 5:43:00 PM

I like how you used the spacing on this one. A long time ago I used the word Exhale with that kind of spacing too!

Jack Jordan
Date: 12/2/2013 6:03:00 PM

It just felt like a good thing to do... Jack

Date: 12/2/2013 9:20:00 AM

...indeed, Jack. Strong Haiku.

Jack Jordan
Date: 12/2/2013 12:08:00 PM

Thanks, Drake. I'm looking forward to this weekend's show... Jack

Date: 12/1/2013 6:39:00 PM

Take a deep breath of that cool air it will invigorate you. I hope the gray clouds part and you are flooded with glorious sunshine Jack.

Jack Jordan
Date: 12/1/2013 8:01:00 PM

Thank you, Richard. It's just been one of those days... Jack

Date: 12/1/2013 3:58:00 PM

- S A D - Jack - well done! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 12/1/2013 4:12:00 PM

It is rather sad. I think it's just the gray skies here... Jack