Haiku 08

rainy gray day lightning strikes the ground... drum roll 6/10/12

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Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 7/9/2012 4:07:00 PM

Nifty long 'a' assonance in your first line...'drum roll' brings a note of trepidation to your piece! Well done, Phyl!! Best wishes, Keith :))

Gwendolen Song

Date: 6/15/2012 11:39:00 AM

Hi Phyllis! I meant what I wrote....let me know and I can call and walk u thru any computer stuff over the phone...The juxto on this haiku is super duper ~Love, Gwendolen

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/11/2012 10:25:00 PM

HI, Phyllis. thanks for your comment today!

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 6/11/2012 11:20:00 AM

The drum roll is a perfect description. If you continue with this talent you will be entering contests and winning! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/10/2012 9:09:00 PM

I like this too, but the other is my favorite! Nice seeing your sweet comments today and to see you had these two haiku up.

James Marshall Goff

Date: 6/10/2012 2:02:00 PM

Beautifully accurate Phyl! Jimbo

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 6/10/2012 1:47:00 PM

Love those days...great description. BG

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/10/2012 12:26:00 PM

sunshine here :) - well done ! - oxox love Anne-Lise

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/10/2012 12:12:00 PM

Very descriptive about a thunder and lightning storm..Great work..Thanks for stopping by, reading, and taking time to comment on my work..Sara