H20

As dawn breaks, She can no longer wait. The thirst is to great, To quench her palate. A journey she takes 10 miles straight. Thru darkness she goes, A bucket she throws On top of her head. Wild animals she dreads Strangers lurking ahead. Sweat covers her face, but with each step., she takes A love of family awaits, Left behind at her place. An old rusty pipe Just in clear sight A cloudy stream of Water. Opens to her delight. Natural resources.... Girl rising contest

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Robin Davis

Date: 9/20/2013 5:52:00 PM

very descriptive and strong. The reader can feel what this girl is going through to support her family. great job.

Cherie Thomas
Date: 9/21/2013 6:07:00 AM

Hi Robin thanks so much for your kind comment. I wanted to capture, her strength & courage, in her hardship through love:) your words mean alot to.me,,,many thanks:) cherie

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 9/1/2013 1:01:00 AM

I love this one - a show of inner strength and taking delight in life. Well penned Cherie! A delightful read.

Cherie Thomas
Date: 9/1/2013 7:20:00 PM

Hi Vicky thanks so much, for your kind comment genuinely appreciate it:) Cherie

Donna Jones

Date: 8/6/2013 7:45:00 AM

I've see a TV show about this....these women are so..brave and strong....ccongratulations on your win...

Cherie Thomas
Date: 8/6/2013 8:15:00 AM

Hi Donna....yes they have a amazing will of strength & courage,,, thanks so much for your lovely comment:0) appreciate your kindness....<3 cherie

Tim Ryerson

Date: 8/6/2013 2:39:00 AM

Congratulations, Cherie!...REALLY love your unique approach here. We take so much for granted...All we have to do is turn on a faucet...

Cherie Thomas
Date: 8/6/2013 8:13:00 AM

I truly appreciate your comment, tim..yes we do:( thanks:0) cherie<3

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/5/2013 12:00:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Cherie...A very original write! :)

Cherie Thomas
Date: 8/5/2013 1:15:00 PM

Hi Eileen, thankyou very much:0) appreciate your lovely comment :)cheriex.

Skat A

Date: 8/5/2013 9:51:00 AM

:-) Congratulations!!! ~SKAT~

Cherie Thomas
Date: 8/5/2013 10:00:00 AM

Hi skat...thankyou:0)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/5/2013 9:02:00 AM

Cherie, ... Congratulations in Richard's "Girl Rising." contest.... always *LINDA

Cherie Thomas
Date: 8/5/2013 9:59:00 AM

Many thanks linda:)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/5/2013 8:08:00 AM

You satisfied my thirst with this one. Congrats and thanks for entering.

Cherie Thomas
Date: 8/5/2013 8:35:00 AM

Thanks so much Richard really enjoyed entering this contest:)

Cherie Thomas

Date: 6/13/2013 10:05:00 AM

Your words are so emotionally touching John, thankyou so much for taking the time out to read and comment...so eloquently expressed, truly appreciate your kindness....thankyou:)

Johnny Rhinem

Date: 6/12/2013 9:25:00 PM

After Rereading This Cool Verse, I Found It Seems Segments Fused Together To Compose A Somewhat Intriguing Perhaps Compelling Scenario In Which Her Beauty Takes Part Within For Lack Of Better Terms ? Mainly I Find Amid This Touching Moment A Truth For Many Within This Life; A Peril A Struggle A Love A Refuge ? Only In The Valley As Also This Age And Time. Thank You Beautiful Cheri, For Your Precious Heart's Kind Visit. Good To Meet You. Love, John

Cherie Thomas

Date: 6/12/2013 8:29:00 PM

Lol m....you know the way to my heart....dont you lolvglad its only one third Im trying to stay away from the calories,,,, many thanks for your comment:0)

Cherie Thomas

Date: 6/12/2013 8:26:00 PM

Hi ink,,, I was watching a program about what woman go through , for natural resources. Which. Is our human right!!!! We spend millions of , dollars. On bottled water,, on a daily basis....while others cant get a pump in there village. Just for h20...never give up is right..my friend!!!! Ty......your comment means alot

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 6/12/2013 5:47:00 PM

I'm sending you a chocalate cupcake for this beautiful poem my dear...okay not the whole cup cake but 1 third.. lol.I hope all is well.

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 6/12/2013 9:38:00 AM

Never give up!!! Excellent write