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Gothic Fantasy

On a dare full well knowing its reputation the evils lurking up there I took a small tent on my back a bottle of whiskey cheese and meats in my pack And just before sundown with handshakes from friends laughter safe wishes all round Ascended Climbing steadily the way quite long quite steep a fall would be deadly Then at very summit tired sweaty bent unpacked my small canvas tent on the rock-smooth ground And even at that early hour thought I heard in the distance the howl of a wolf or a Baskerville hound Growing dark now Oh how black this night might be a night with no moon no rocks to give shelter no trees Alone in that gloom I built a fire a small fire with what few twigs I could find Now again that distant howl and in my mind see blazing red orbs in the midnight mist looking out at me adding doubt mounting fear cold sweat to my misery Energy nearly spent I found it impossible in sheer rock to drive wooden stakes for my tent So I sat by my small blaze on that bare mountain wrapped in a blanket now too midnight-dark to try a descent Just at the witching hour a strange wind came up and though I hovered o'er put out my fire Then this smell (aroma is far too nice a word) on the wind stench from the pit of HELL! All Satan's demons in circle appeared the night lit up by my smoldering fear They shrieked laughed belched hot lava Hear those hounds of Hell and by winds-eerie music dance their drunken bacchanal Pierced by searing pitchforks body on fire smoking pleading scorched down to an ember It was the DEVIL'S voice close to my ear cursing me the last I remember But HARK now! My rooster crows from my hovel's dirt floor I'm in my bed In poverty's room far removed from the horrors the mountainous gloom and safe from red SATAN'S eternal doom

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 5/29/2014 7:19:00 PM
Wow!!! What a tale you tell Daver. I loved every word of it. It has been awhile since I have been at the soup, but I just wanted to drop in and say hie and read your wonderful writing again. Love, Lainie
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Date: 4/20/2010 12:29:00 PM
Oh, my goodness, Daver. Go read my poem I just posted for the "leave me hanging" contest. Is this one a dream?? Because my poem I posted was a dream and I could not reveal the ending, but it's like yours. I dreamt of Satan. so scary!! By the way, I am seeing your name is dave austin, but amy is insisting your name is Raustin or something like that and I started to doubt myself and agree with her (because of your email address) Luv, andrea
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Date: 5/9/2009 10:13:00 AM
Very intense, hard as the surface written in the poem, very good. I to have been ambushed by demons, So when are we going camping, lol
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Date: 4/9/2009 2:59:00 PM
Smile~Yes, you do have quite an imagination do You not~along with a very gifted ability to write I can surely see!!:)~"Hello Daver, Good To Finally Meet & View Your Words My Friend!!":)~And fortunately for Yourself, it was all but merely a dream! Or, was it but a dream? Smile, either way, "Wonderful Write My Gifted Brother!!:)~"My Love Always To 'You & Your Loves,' John!!:) Happy Easter Daver ~
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Date: 4/6/2009 5:34:00 AM
Boy what were you drinking? (I know it's a fantasy) Sounds like Absinthe - or some shaman's hallucinogenic concoction. Quite a journey you took me on there :-D PS - I love reading your comments on my poems. Thank you. And I agree - there's nothing worse than eating out and getting lousy food!
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Date: 4/5/2009 12:30:00 PM
Aww Daver, here I am again thanking you. So appreciate your thoughtful wishes and congrats. You are a total sweetheart. Thank you so much. Hugs, Shar xoxo
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Date: 4/3/2009 7:20:00 AM
Daver, you are too sweet! Thanks for your thoughtful comment and for your explanation. Will definitely look that up for a listen (read?) as my daughter is getting married tomorrow and I am insane and shouldn't even be here!!!! Love, Shar
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Date: 4/3/2009 6:36:00 AM
OMGosh I could hear you moo ha haaing in my ear, gave me the creeps and made me eeesshh my shoulders, you evil little man. I will muster enough courage this weekend to listen to the thingy Ive already forgotten the name
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Date: 4/2/2009 5:34:00 PM
Boy I'm with Sharon. Such an ominous write. Note to self,,,never go climbing with Daver!
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Date: 4/2/2009 4:09:00 PM
What did you eat before going to sleep??? Serious good writing that held the reader captive and would not let go. Deliciously dark. I could have read several pages of this, at least. Is there more? Hope so. Love, Shar
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Date: 4/2/2009 10:23:00 AM
Brilliant poem, Daver! I felt like I was with you on the journey up the mountain; your images were so clear and compelling. The torment when the devils voice is heard has been well foreshadowed in the prior verses. Love the way this poem ended, too! Great work!
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Date: 4/2/2009 7:17:00 AM
loved the imagery... you really got me on the egdE! ~ Arany
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