Goodbye

Black and white on the days of sun Color on the days of rain Being away is nothing fun Loving you is loving in vain For my heart can bear no more The pain that you make me endure On the days where my body you adore And my necessities you cure For my heart can bear no more The pain you make me tolerate On the days where you leave my heart sore And my rules you violate

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Moon Flower

Date: 9/27/2016 3:36:00 AM

That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Junys. :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/20/2016 1:36:00 PM

Junys, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Moon Flower

Date: 9/20/2016 9:45:00 AM

That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Junys Javier. :)

Skat A

Date: 9/19/2016 9:33:00 PM

Junys Javier, Georgie, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 9/19/2016 4:08:00 PM

OOOh, like the last line, stings exactly as it should. Sad piece, Javier. Welcome to Soup, a cool site where poets from around the globe post poems, archive poems, read poems, comment on poems and are inspired to write even more poems. There are many links and ways to connect to other soupers. It may take some time to figure things out, but once you do, you'll find the site is easy to manoeuver around. I hope you enjoy your membership ... and keep writing!

Manmath Dalei

Date: 9/19/2016 12:03:00 AM

Welcome to Poerty Soup. Good entry with a nice poem. Hope u will enjoy PS very much.Very meaningful & deep write. Keep on writing..........//:) with love