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A moment... Only a moment, lost forever. Love I knew, like angels soaring on diaphanous wings through gently weeping clouds, then searing hate filled burning anger, my soul set afire with scorching embers and blue flames, the pain melting my body into puddles filled by dripping sorrow and blocks of icy resentment. This I felt, in that... moment, I died inside. The feeling of a thousand millipedes crawling over my skin made it tingle. My legs like pudding dangled from my numbed body as if they were made of dough. I had to sit before I fell. My strong heart beating for you stopped... for a moment. Like Kodachrome images tattooed in vivid color on bas-relief sculptures in my memory, I could taste the bitter sadness and disappointment in your eyes the moment... you left. 10/29/15

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Date: 11/10/2015 11:34:00 AM
You are an amazing poet James,, Congratulations on your awesome win. SKAT
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James Inman
Date: 11/10/2015 3:35:00 PM
What a wonderful sweet thing to say, SKAT. Thank You!
Date: 11/9/2015 10:13:00 PM
Well done, James. The structure works well- I can almost see you walking round a room in random patterns, head in hands, talking to yourself, trying to work things out in your mind. Great write. Congrats! Viv
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Date: 11/10/2015 3:33:00 PM
Where were you, Viv? I didn't see you there, lol. If I could have held my laptop in my hands while I was writing this I might have been doing just what you said. Probably would have given me a terrible headache. Thanks for the nice comment.
Date: 11/9/2015 7:38:00 PM
Well done, James... novel layout.
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James Inman
Date: 11/10/2015 3:29:00 PM
Thank you Lin.
Date: 11/9/2015 6:35:00 PM
Creative poem and layout!
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James Inman
Date: 11/10/2015 3:28:00 PM
Thank you Richard. I like setting the tone of some of my poems with the way its laid out, emphasizing various words and phrases.
Date: 11/9/2015 5:37:00 PM
Amazing write, James. Congrats on your nice win! Sandra
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James Inman
Date: 11/10/2015 3:27:00 PM
Thanks for the wonderful comment Sandra.
Date: 11/2/2015 3:24:00 PM
Very emotive and expressive work..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara..Your comments were uplifting..
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James Inman
Date: 11/2/2015 3:45:00 PM
Thank you Sara.
Date: 11/2/2015 2:56:00 AM
Wow! This is just awesome, James! I can see you just totally went out with your creative talent here and the muse was in full swing! Loved the layout and content.7 hugs!
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James Inman
Date: 11/2/2015 10:16:00 AM
Thank you Kim. Almost everything I write seems to be sad or gory for me lately. Halloween I guess.
Date: 10/30/2015 8:59:00 PM
This is the sort of write that suits Casarah's style, James, and you deserve extra Brownie points for using 'diaphanous'. Good luck in the contest, matey. Regards, Viv
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James Inman
Date: 10/31/2015 7:30:00 AM
Thanks Viv, one of those writes that just come out and leave you wondering, what! Where did that come from!?
Date: 10/29/2015 3:34:00 PM
wow, this is amazing writing, Ralph. This poem is gonna be HIGH on the list, or I'll be a monkey's uncle!!
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James Inman
Date: 10/29/2015 8:22:00 PM
Andrea, LOL, I don't think you have to worry about being anyone's uncle. Thank you for the great comment.
Date: 10/29/2015 12:14:00 PM
I too love the shape of this poem, where the words from your pen, are enhanced and profound.
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James Inman
Date: 10/29/2015 8:17:00 PM
Harry, thank you. Very kind words from you.
Date: 10/29/2015 11:04:00 AM
your words sure danced off the page James - love the creative layout - good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx7
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James Inman
Date: 10/29/2015 11:32:00 AM
Thanks Jan.

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