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Received N/A in the contest it was originally written for

Entered into When love Reckons for a second time
Sponsored by Nayda Ivette Negron

I’ll never forget my first day at primary school You bounded into the classroom, flashing a gap tooth smile With your blonde curly hair and blue eyes, I was smitten My first crush at the tender age of five! Over the years we became inseparable Then one day you told me terrible news Your dad had a promotion and you were leaving the area We both sobbed buckets of tears and vowed to stay in touch. Letters flew between us like arrows, then suddenly they stopped Years passed and I married then subsequently divorced When moving house I came across your letters I’d kept them in an old shoebox, they were tied with blue ribbon. I sat reminiscing wondering how your life had panned out Months later I joined friends re-united - To my amazement I found your name I was overjoyed when you replied to my contact We had so much to talk about and a lot of catching up to do I was hesitant when you suggested meeting Would those childhood feelings still be the same? The minute I saw you at the station my heart pounded Still the same steel blue eyes, but a lot less hair! We talked late into the small hours of the night and when we kissed … I felt like a teenager again! We had a whirlwind romance and married three months later So blissfully happy, making up for lost time … Until Until ….the day you’d gone to buy my birthday present Normally we’d have been together but you wanted to surprise me You kissed my cheek, drove off on your motorbike into the distance My memory of what happened next is so hazy All I remember is a knock on the door Two policemen were standing there … I started to scream N/A in A love lost then found, only to lose again Contest judged on 08~26~16 FICTIONAL WRITE FOR CONTEST 07~27~16

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Date: 9/2/2016 2:00:00 AM
This really touched me, I couldn't stop reading, Then I knew what was coming, How unlucky, It's a fantastic poem, congrats xxxxxxxxxxxxx
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Date: 9/2/2016 2:23:00 AM
Thanks Wendy:-) It was written pretty quickly in a bout 15 minutes I guess the lack of restriction with syllables and rhymes helped me:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/31/2016 4:15:00 PM
Such a wonderfully romantic poem that addressed the theme so well. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 9/2/2016 2:21:00 AM
Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/31/2016 4:02:00 PM
Jan, I don't normally cry when reading poetry, but this one brought tears to my eyes. Great, and sad, love story (and glad, as I see in comments below, that it is fictional for you). Agnes
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Date: 8/31/2016 4:04:00 PM
Yes its pure fiction Agnes:-) I wrote it for another contest but its not yet been judged and it fitted Nayda's contest perfectly:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/31/2016 2:12:00 PM
Congratulations Jan on the placement of the contest.
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Date: 8/31/2016 2:18:00 PM
Many thanks for a great placement Nayda:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/6/2016 3:52:00 PM
An extraordinary write. I love story poems and the emotional journey you have woven beginning with the innocence of youth, the later years of wondering, the fulfillment and joy of love's circle complete to the shock of "the knock on the door", thus shattering love's circle with "I started to scream". The imagery you so deftly portray in magnificent detail is a testament to your incredible talent.This could easily be a movie script, with "Reba" playing in the background! blessings, lynn
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Date: 8/16/2016 1:26:00 PM
Thanks Lynn I loved the theme that was set for the contest and this poem just flowed and was written in about 15 minutes:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/4/2016 7:17:00 AM
jan what you doing to people how very sad . but a winner me thinks
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Date: 8/4/2016 12:22:00 PM
This only took me about 15 mins to write Stephen - such a sad scene but my muse was on overdrive:-( hugs jan xx
Date: 8/3/2016 12:48:00 PM
How sad Jan. A lovely write. Some of us don't have to worry about situations like this. Know one I've ever known wanted me a second time, haha.
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Date: 8/3/2016 2:51:00 PM
Your comment made me smile James:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/30/2016 10:58:00 PM
You tell a sad tale of love and loss very well in this work! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 8/1/2016 3:53:00 AM
Thanks so much Matthew:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/30/2016 9:07:00 PM
OMG Jan, I know this is fiction but how sad this is, I don't think we ever forget our first love but meeting up later in life and then losing them how awful that would be, thank goodness it s fiction, so well written my friend...Take care........Vera
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Date: 8/1/2016 3:57:00 AM
Total fiction for me but sadly some people can relate to parts of it:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/30/2016 10:35:00 AM
Wow, what a beautiful sad romantic story, your talent shines!
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Date: 8/1/2016 3:56:00 AM
Thanks my friend - it only took about 15 mins to write - maybe I should write free verse more often :-) hugs jan xx
Date: 7/29/2016 11:03:00 PM
A very sad story Jan....best wishes in the contest
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Date: 8/1/2016 3:55:00 AM
Thanks Jospeh:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/29/2016 3:27:00 PM
Hi Jan, this is an amazing write, an excellent piece of story telling. Such joy, such sorrow, such joy, such sorrow. There is always something one can relate to in an emotional write such as this Jan. Even i have a tear at a very sad memory your write brings back to me. This is the way of poetry, the best touches us in some deep way. This is an excellent write, it is a seven and a fave Jan. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 8/1/2016 3:55:00 AM
Thanks Mike It only took about 15 mins to write as I had no restriction using free verse - am glad you liked my sad poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/29/2016 3:02:00 PM
Wow I just read the comment below, I was hacked what an insensitive remark. Very sad and touching. Also as I see some were really affected by the poem. A Fav.
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Date: 7/29/2016 3:06:00 PM
Thanks Armand I truly appreciate your support - yes the poem is a sad one and it's been very emotional for me reading the comments of those who can relate to the poem in some way or other:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/29/2016 3:00:00 PM
Jan did you scream when you saw the two policemen because you got excited thinking your husband had gotten you two male strippers for your birthday?
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Date: 8/1/2016 3:54:00 AM
I could tell from your helmets you weren't real policemen lol:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/30/2016 10:36:00 AM
I wish to point out that that when me and Maurice showed up, this is just a part time job we do! :)
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/29/2016 3:03:00 PM
Ha ha - I hadn't even thought of that interpretation of the policeman - will have to make that into another humourous poem lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/29/2016 1:31:00 AM
The last four lines is a bad nightmare I had long ago but can never forget:( Strange how one can relate to totally different poems written by other poets, and that's why I like poetry:)
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Date: 7/29/2016 11:59:00 AM
I am so sorry it brings back sad memories Jo :-( hugs jan xx
Date: 7/28/2016 7:33:00 AM
This very emotional (not always) fictional write happened in my family. Congratulations on saying all the things we found hard to understand. God Bless....
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Date: 7/28/2016 7:36:00 AM
Oh Judy I am so sorry this actually happened in your life - for me it is just fiction for a contest - I can only being to imagine how difficult it must be for anyone in this situation:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/28/2016 5:53:00 AM
Wow
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Date: 7/28/2016 6:59:00 AM
Hope that's a good WOW :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/28/2016 5:14:00 AM
Hi, Jan, I'm impressed with your write today, I've forgotten you also have this side of you. Glad this is a story... I got chills once the police officer knocked on the door. My heart dropped just imagining what the imaginary character went through. Reminds me of a true story... Anyways A 7 ... hugs to you. Skat
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Date: 7/28/2016 6:57:00 AM
Thanks Skat :-):-) I do like to surprise people with more serious types of poems but I do tend to gravitate towards writing more humourous poems:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/28/2016 2:07:00 AM
Thumbs up on the imagery! Must say; I could feel it... And, had you not commented on one of my poems; I wonder what it would be like between you and I? If things were different they wouldn't be the same... Poetry in motion/action... It's personally refreshing.
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Date: 7/28/2016 3:40:00 AM
Thanks so much Ir0nic I'm glad you enjoyed my poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/28/2016 1:34:00 AM
wow, Jan What an imagination. I had no clue how to do this contest. I wish I would have thought of this!!! SEVEN
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Date: 7/28/2016 3:39:00 AM
I think because I wasn't restricted with rhyme or syllables and form it flowed very easily and only took about 15 mins to write if that:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/28/2016 12:11:00 AM
Seems happy endings aren't a given anymore. Powerful write, dear. Always did love blue eyes! Thanks for your recent visit. I've been away. Can't seem to find the words....Hugs, dear.
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Date: 7/28/2016 3:38:00 AM
It was lovely to see you back yesterday - the break has done you good!:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 7/28/2016 12:05:00 AM
Very good!
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Date: 7/28/2016 3:37:00 AM
Thanks Mike:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 6:40:00 PM
Jan , you sure can write a believable story, this is a real winner, your muse is on fire ~
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Date: 7/28/2016 3:36:00 AM
Thanks so much Constance:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 6:20:00 PM
What a stirring emotional write, kept me on the edge of my seat, and then the end...well just amazing!!! I think we have another first place here...you are definitely on a roll!A7
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Date: 7/27/2016 6:22:00 PM
Oh thanks for the vote of confidence John:-) I was worried it was too long and people would lose interest - I am inspired by contests but the joy of having people read far outweighs a win ... but wins are a great way of getting extra exposure to a poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/27/2016 4:09:00 PM
a riveting story, jan, and you kept me intrigued until the very end. glad that it's fictional! best of luck in the contest...
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Date: 7/27/2016 4:27:00 PM
Thanks Ilene I like to go out of my comfort zone with my writing and this contest inspired me:-) hugs Jan xx
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